I feel you! Today I have remained in the fog which I woke in. I relate to the boy in a way that I am doing this dream jumping today. I also enjoy fishing to create stories in my mind and hopefully, when I get them converted to ink I can share back. Thank you for sharing.
You are missing some question marks.
I do love the dialog
I wonder if they do indeed, wait til last minute next year.
I got a futuristic feel just from your character's names.
Would it not be helpful if they could just shop on the internet.JK
This made me feel like you have been through it, and in most cases of poetry, may be truth here. I feel like you could use this and the experience that drove you to write this piece to a bigger story. It says so much that I want to help you by pulling you away from the dark mirror you seem to look upon and allow you to see yourself in a better light.
Honesty? I do not favor poetry and am probably not going to be your best reviewer.I am no good at sharing my feelings via abstractions.
I did however; Felt this as I read it and that is great writing on your part. I hope you continue to live in words as I do either way. Thank you for sharing and I hope I see more of you here.
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