This memoir was very touching. The story reminded me of one of my own, the breakup about the same way, although we never got back together and we had a very short relationship. It was still my frist relationship and still very special. Something I will never forget for sure, especially the pain of the break up. I felt completely there, feeling exactly what you had felt and feeling that it had been happening to me as well.
For improvement I would just suggest going through and searching out all the times you typed her name, make sure it is capitalized every time. I noticed a few times where it wasn't.
I hope everything is still going well between the two of you. You're lucky you've fallen in love so deeply and got that second chance.
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This was great to read. I was very pleased to keep reading it. Having had a pretty rough time the last couple days it's been interesting to see how my own writing has been effected. I felt my mood lighten and I could almost see myself in these moments as if I was shadowing your memories, seeing them in real time.
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