Good rhyming in this poem. My interpretation is that the individual under the tree is the child in the poem, perhaps even the child who is hearing the children's poem. I think children would find this idea interesting. It's simple and a child should be able to understand most of it, but it is also graceful. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Great rhyming in this poem. Your words capture a lot of the beauty and wonder of the stars. Good use of metaphors such as stars winking. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Your scene is well described, with pleasant choices of words and sentences. I love the picture, where did you get it from? This is a cheerful and fantastical poem. Thank you for sharing it.
I like the way this poem mixes the way things are sensed, for example by describing sounds as something seen, or describing light as heard. It has an interesting effect. Thank you for your excellent poem.
This poem is cool and clever. It brings to mind a combination of magical and city images in a way that is very unusual. It reminds me of Neil Gaiman. The writing style is graceful and pleasant. Thank you for sharing this poem.
I have never heard of Kacheeks, Shoryus, or Chias, but they are imaginative. The Fairie Xweetok is a hero. I guess you switched tenses from the present to the past tense in the second-to-last verse. Maybe you should just keep that at one tense. Your poem was evocative and pleasantly written. Thank you.
Your poem is imaginative and articulate. I guess many people, including myself, and perhaps you, long for a more magical reality, and this poem expresses that. Thank you.
Good to see another classical fantasy poet out there (I am one). I enjoyed your poem. The lines have an interesting tendency to almost rhyme but not quite, which I find pleasant and interesting. I guess there are a few minor technical issues, like using the word "than" in "And than if I shall" instead of the word "then," which seems like the correct word. But I thought it was a very good poem overall.
An abba quatrain poem huh? Very interesting. I guess it is a scary poem. The ending reminds me of a serial killer, although it seems like it's more of a supernatural shadow monster kind of thing. Am I right?
Your poem is pretty. I like the rhyming, which I think is a great literary device which is unfortunately out of fashion. What made you choose the phoenix as the object of the poem?
Thank you for your excellent poem.
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