This is really good. When I first started writing this was what I was aiming for, but struggled with. It is short and sweet but at the same time, able to paint an amazing image in my mind and send shivers down my spine. One tiny thing I spotted, on the 'Tuesday, November 30th 2010' paragraph Mothers needs an apostraphe. Overall a great piece, well done!
NCT.
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