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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Ha, I enjoyed reading this.
I'm a huge song parody fan.
Weird Al got me hooked on them and a couple of other youtube people as well.
I liked the hook of yours very catchy and fits pretty well to the original song beat.
I was singing it in my head as I read it.
The second stanza was my favorite I loved how you used "rage against the machine."
Made me smile.
Anyway I really enjoyed this it's a pretty good parody, you should write more.
I love a good song parody haha.
Thanks of sharing and best of luck writing!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
What a strong piece.
I think we all struggle on a daily basis with decisions that boggle the mind.
And you have written a piece that address those challenges in a very profound way.
I'm not to sure about the flow though the first stanza seems a little choppy at places and doesn't fit as well as the other two.
That's just my opinion though.
But I really did enjoy the second stanza that one is my favorite such powerful words and a great flow that leaves the reader thinking.
Anyway thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello there,
this is a nice poem, interesting to read about as I think many people suffer from the same issues.
The computer, internet, the whole shebang is very addicting to say the least.
So needless to say I did enjoy the concept of your poem.
I feel though it's a little choppy, the rhyming is kind of off at places,
and others don't rhyme at all, these are just my opinions though.
But I feel with maybe a little fine combing and revising
this could be a great poem, it's definitely a concept many relate too.
Anyway thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey there, congrats on the yellow case!
I really liked this poem, you use a great amount of descriptive words
which really helps the reader visualize the piece.
The second stanza was my favorite, mainly cause it seems you're finally able to fly
It had a very nice flow throughout the whole piece.
Overall very nice poem!
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a funny poem, I dunno if cute would be a good word for it but funny
I definitely went in thinking this was about wind haha.
It was presently entertaining though, I think children would get a kick out of it.
I liked the second stanza it had a lot of comedic elements in such a short amount of space.
Anyway the whole overall poem was very entertaining and fun to read
thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!

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Review of I feel... I want  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this poem, it seems like it has a purpose for you.
You are convey a great amount of emotions that are important to you
I really like the last stanza cause I think a lot of people feel that way
The clock is always ticking and they don't have enough time to get everything they want done.
I had a nice flow to it as well, and most of the rhyming was great.
This is overall a very nice emotional poem,
thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I've always been a fan of your poetry
and it's because of poems like this.
I love your play with words, its so captivating,
and you really made it fit so well with the acrostic words,
it flows perfectly and rhymes great too.
Overall great poem, I found nothing wrong with it.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow, this is really a sad and moving poem.
You did a great job at conveying the emotions,
so that the reader really felt what you were trying to get across.
I enjoyed how you put emphasis on some parts by messing with the size's and boldness.
I feel like it really matches the tone well.
Especially the last line, even though maybe a little too small, it gives the poem
a nice strong finish.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem is super cute.
I like the subject of it
and the humor to it.
It makes the poem very enjoyable.
I couldn't help but laugh at parts.
Especially the last stanza.
I like the different perspective you took.
Writing about Pluto and there planet
It's just not something you read about everyday.
Very refreshing change.
Anyway thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello,
I liked this poem,
your title fits with the poem very well.
I did find the rhyming a little off at times
as well as the flow a little choppy.
But that's just my opinion
You did a really nice job at getting your emotions out.
People can relate to it,
it just could use a little fine tuning and it would be a great poem.
Anyway thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is an interesting poem.
I like the dark undertones to it.
Creates a mysterious vibe that draws the reader in.
it flows nicely...
You also do a good job at imagery, it really paints a picture in the readers mind.
Nice word choice!
I like the third stanza the best.
I feel it has the greatest and strongest imagery.
Anyway thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!


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Review of The Army Mother  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this poem a lot.
You can sense the emotion and get really drawn into the poem.
It flows gracefully.
It is one of few poems on this site that I really can relate to
not as a mother though, just as a sister.
I think a lot of people will be able to relate and understand
what you feel.
Anyway I see nothing wrong with this poem,
it conveys your feelings well and has
a good rhyming structure to it.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing!

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Review of Face to the Floor  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I do like this poem because it does tell you and let
the readers know that overdoes does happen,
people rarely see that they have a problem
and some unfortunately don't get the help the need in time.
So I like that you tackled that issue and wrote about it.

I liked the line "Wore out like chewed gum"
that's an interesting analogy.

But I find parts of the poem a little to straightforward
kind of like just stating what happened not really leaving anything to the mind.
I just feel it could use a little spicing up and maybe some added details
to create more for the reader to get lost it.
Some of the rhymes seem kind of out of place and just put there to rhyme.

These are just my opinions though, and you do have a fine piece.
But with some tweaking it could be great.

Anyway thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow, this is a really emotional poem
I really like the use of the seasons
it makes the poem seem very whole,
The flow on this is very good,
I especially liked the rhymes,
they didn't seem forced and fit with the poem.
Anyway I really did enjoy this piece,
It makes the reader connect with the author
and understand their emotions.
Thanks you for sharing this and best of luck writing.

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Review of Ambition  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
haha,
This is a cute poem,
It has a lot of funny points to it,
I can just imagine someone actually searching for ambition.
The flow is very one key and it has a nice melody to it.
Very catchy which is what I liked about it none of the rhymes sounded forced
anyway I hope you find your ambition.

thanks for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Old Lies Die Hard  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I like the idea of this,
loosing ones self to another version of ones self.
It has some really creative ideas with it.
But the different font colors are kind of a distraction
and also at least to me are difficult to read at some points.
I feel like it takes away from the poem at times,
Cause I got lost at times trying to make out the worlds.
I also found it confusing how you went from thought
to words, to lies.
If you focused on one of those ideas,
or even possibly expanded on the others
I feel it would make the poem much stronger,
But these are just my opinions, feel free to do what them as you please.
Anyway thank you for sharing this and best of luck writing

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Review of A VIEW ON REVIEWS  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I never really looked at it this way.
But I like how you wrote this, it brought fourth many good points.
It also made me go back and look at mine, and reply to people I haven't replied too.
Usually if I don't reply its cause I'm on my phone and then forget when I get on the computer.
But I think I'm going to make more of an effort to reply cause reviewers usually do put a lot of effort in reviews.
And I must admit even I find a thank you gratifying.
Anyway this is a nice piece that brings light to an issue a lot of people on here don't talk about
Thanks for sharing this and best of luck writing.


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Review of Flinch  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This poem has a dark tone too it, I'm not a huge fan of dark poems,
but I like the imagery you use,
it leaves an impression on the reader.
I mean love isn't always about rainbows and what not,
there is a much darker side to it, and I like how you voiced
your view on it.
I found the flow to be a little choppy at times,
but the usually always happens in free verse poems,
I also noticed that in the end of line 7 and beginning of line 8
"and" is used twice. If that makes sense like it says " leaving their traces through scar tissue and and the bright red mark of"

Anyway I hope this helps and thank you for sharing this piece best of luck writing!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very deep poem,
I love how you gave Summer human characteristics it really brings this piece to life.
The sadness washes over this poem, with the realization of how things are different these days then they use to be.
You give it a great voice. It makes you think and have empathy for the season, which means you did a great job at giving Summer human emotions and making it seem real.
The pace of this poem is good very easy to follow along to and read.
Thank you for sharing this piece and best of luck writing.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
I've never been one who is able to capture the art of haikuing.
It just eludes me.
I really these three though, I like the last one it made me smile.
You do a nice job at getting the readers attention and holding it,
from the first haiku to the last.
I like how they all have some element of little critters in them.
I'm a sucker for things that have animals in them.
The first one is sad, but it balances out since the other ones have lighter themes to them,
I think incorporating different emotions in each haiku makes this relateable to a large group of readers.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello there,

This was a really nice piece, very well written,
I really enjoyed the style, it had a well developed plot
and a lot of character descriptions.
I also liked the style it was fitting for the story you told.
I like the deep almost terrifying feeling it has to it.
That's what kept me hooked from beginning to end.

Thank you for sharing and best of luck writing.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for all your kind and dedicated reviews!


I love the imagery in this, especially the second stanza, you can really get a visual sense of the writing.
I love the message to this, full of hope not despair, it's rare to find that when talking how much time we have left.
You have a very positive outlook on it.
You seem to have a very close relationship with Him.
I enjoyed reading this piece,
thank you for sharing it and best of luck writing.


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Review of Words of Wisdom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like this poem,
it doesn't have a happy ending,
which is refreshing, most poems have happy endings,
but this piece holds a sense of reality many push out of their mind.
You have some really well written rhymes with nice word choices
My favorite stanza was the second to last one,
it had some really intense lines in it that made me think.
This poem is a real thought provoking piece. I like that quality about it.
In the second line I noticed "my" was capitalized I don't know if that was done on purpose or not.
So I thought I'd point it out.
Anyway this was a really well written piece.
Thank you for sharing it and best of luck writing.



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Rated: E | (4.0)
You did a great job at capturing the essence of February.
Although I'm sure to some people February isn't still cold or it stays cold longer,
So it might be hard for them to relate.
But other then that this is a great poem, and is impressive for being written in a mere 28 words
Quiet a challenge, a challenge you handled nicely.
You created a good image of what February is like for you.
I really enjoyed reading this.

Thank you fro sharing and best of luck writing.


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Review of Winter Speech  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a sweet poem, it shows that you really care about her.
And that you are devoted to her no matter what.
I like that.
I love the honesty in this poem, and how you poured your heart out to her.
You're imagery is very nice as well.
I like the line "I'll follow like moths to your flame"
Interesting word choice.
I hope you made it to her that night.
Thank you for sharing this poem, it brightened my day.
Best of luck writing and have a nice birthday!



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