That was so lovely and I could feel the heart you poured into it. It was warm and just right. You revealed information at the right times, built and maintained tension perfectly. I was drawn into the story and quickly loved the couple, making it personally engaging. You are a talented writer.
You are wonderful at conveying emotion and telling a story that everyone can relate too. I know that situation all to well. You may want to work on word choice and flood while remaining true to the emotional tone of it. Overall it was a lovely and engaging read.
That was lovely and engaging, drawing the reader in and keeping them there, in that moment. Its a moment everyone either knows, or wants to know creating a powerful bond. I enjoyed reading it and being a part, thank you for sharing. If there was something I'd suggest is that you'd do away with the red capitals.
I like the way you used mixed styles to inform and entertain, painting a clear and physical image to illustrate the idea. The fact you effectively did do only in a few lines is impressive. While it really didn't rhyme, it didn't need to because of the free style. You may want to rework it a little for flow, the words negative and replace catch a bit. Try smaller, but still effective word replacements and maybe some internal rhyme sceme.
That was lovely. I enjoyed the way you transitioned between stanzas and how well the ideas flowed one into another. It was very smooth to read and the emotion built steadily ate great rate. The optimism and imagery of the first line caught my attention and continued throughout. It was very well done.
That was very good, it set a good pace and the story fell into place, with strong characters and plot develop. The begining really catches your attention and the tale keeps it. I look forward to reading the next part. I found a few minor typos like "quite" instead of "quiet" but over all its an excellent tale, well told and engaging.
That was lovely. I love the way you described the moments leading up to the dragon flies appearance and the impact it made in your world view. I loved following your musings as you searched for the purpose and meaning of the message it carried and continues to carry. It was very well done.
That was very clever and well done given the guidelines you were working with. The subject of hamlet or any Shakespearean piece is complicated without restrictions but you obviously put s great deal of work into it. Your analysis of falsehood, misdirection and deflection worked beautifully.
I'm working on the fourth draft of a manuscript that I hope to publish as a series of ebooks. It seems like every time I do a read thru of a revised, expanded and edited print, my red pen gets busy all over again, and each draft is better than the last. This really helped, thank you.
The images were sharply drawn and vibrant, I was immediately drawn in and engaged. The description of the shapes and colors made me feel and see it. You built the scene and let the tension grow. Is it something you recall seeing or something you wished into reality?
I agree with you completely, as a book enthusiasts myself. There is nothing better than the feel of turning paper pages and the slight fading of worn print, loved and reread repeatedly. Your piece was well written and well told,in bold clear language that remained fluid and sof
That was fascinating and I'm s huge fan of the ancient aliens theory, which I back completely. Perhaps if it wasnt built by them it was built for them as a way for humans to connect with them assuming that humans associated them with Gods. Too many coincidences can't be explained any other way. This piece introduced ideas and allowed the reader to draw their own conclusions based on facts provided. Naysayers may never see the truth of it but many do.
That was powerfully written and paints a vivid picture of a problem that we have created with our own foolishness and short sightedness. The wording was a bit hard to follow in places and the flow was halting but sounded deliberately so. I would simply say humanity rather than the humanity. And perhaps soften the tone abit
That was lovely, sweet and simple, full of heart and grace. It flowed well, not only the sound of it, bit also the tale, true love growing from green to gold. I'm going to explore the form myself. Something new is always fun to play with and leads to surprising results
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Once upon a time there was a family of Terythian Trolls from the Tembryth clan. Everyday they played the part of human in order to mix with the locals. And every night they supped beneath the branches of the Old Mother who lay dead center of the Old Folk Apple Orchard. They would practice the old magiks and talk about the Old Days, before mankind had come and made a mess of the world. Many others did once and then they didn't. This family had always done. Because of that, they were powerful, more so than their kith and kin who left the Old Ways in the west. There came a time when humans turned on their Troll neighbors and a great conflict shook the wood and surrounding communities. Until finally they to called upon the Old Mother who used her magik, supplemented by the power of the Troll Collective and forged a space for her people, hidden from the eyes and hearts of humans, protected by glamour and a great gate. All faer and old folk of many different species found their way there and continue to do so today.
That was a lovely little poem with powerful imagery and language. It had genuinely heartfelt spirit and truth that I can tell mean a great deal to you. good job with this poem, Blessed Be
I like that, as I read it I it flowed with a very fluid style, you could almost put it to music. it is a very inclusive prayer that I know the universe will hear and answer, and karma will shine brightly on the one who cast it.
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