this was a very powerful piece. you expressed the hurt and sadness and then you stayed true and showed that you don't have to rely on them for happiness. good work!
I liked the upbeat tone and how you wrote about a problem that many kids have problems with: fitting in. the fact that the platypus went from depressed, grabbing at straws to get out of school, to happy in one day, made me feel like I was back in elementary school again. great short story!
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