What an amazing piece. It had me hooked from the first line, down to the last. I can totally feel the emotion of the piece, as well as being able to relate to it. I definitely want to read more.
Such a wonderful read. I respect your motivation as sometimes I find myself trying to find the grace to accept God's will and Glory.
Please, keep up the great work!
This was a very interesting paragraph. Unfortunately it was only a paragraph because my curiosity was growing. An excellent start to something I wouldn't mind reading more of. Again, great piece.
I liked this submission. It was something new, especially the dialogue. It gave the character a brand new personality and not one that follows the stereotypical psycho. Nothing here distracted the reader from the piece which meant it flowed great.
Favorite line: "Both his eyes were bout poppin out his head anyway, i just kinda helped one along."
Wicked sense of humor there, definitely a much earned chuckle. Keep up the great work!
I loved the use of a quarter in this. The first time I read a piece like this, so it's an added bonus. Definitely a great read, I would love to see more of this style of writing.
This was a very good piece. It flowed well and kept me reading up to the last line. The rhyming doesn't feel forced which is a major plus, kept the piece flowing perfectly. Truly a great submission, keep up the writing!
When first reading the title, I did not have a clue on what the piece would be about, so that's a major plus.
There was a small part that confused me just a bit and it was the first sentence of the second line. You had begun to describe the cottage but then quickly changed the direction of the story. It's not that it was a bad thing, it just threw me off a bit.
All in all, a very good piece! Keep it up!
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