Your essay is a great depiction of feelings and life of a medic who sacrifices his time and energy for the benefit of the others,yet his valuable service remains unnoticed in the eyes of the general public.Apart from some grammar errors,this really is an honest piece of writing.Well done and keep writing!
I was attracted by your topic. I agree with your point that one should stand up against injustices done to the people who are in minority or ignored or tortured for raising their voices to get their rights. Your use of wide array of examples demonstrates your great extent of your knowledge on the given subject . It's unfortunate but true that how we become lethargic and feign silence when a woman is harassed on the street or when people in power abuse their power by retorting to malfeasance acts. But when they turn their guns towards us , we began censuring others for not standing with us.
Some suggestions: Their are some subject-verb agreement errors(violent eye of society casts). Moreover, your use of 'them' is sometimes ambiguous; it's not clear as to what 'them' is referring to.
Just keep writing because I want to read more what you think!
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