very good attempt b'coz u r writing a love poem so u should write it wid more deepness and emotionality
some words they r not suitable in poems r
bleeds
cheating
try to end up a love poem wid extrem heart feelings not wid a complain
today i saw ur portfolio. in less than 1 month u r doing very good . now a days i m busy in studies and also in my coming book. whenever i will get time , i will pass through all portfolio items, never get disappointed. u can send mail to various writters 4 reviewing. keep writing. god will support u . update ur favouate list and try 2 communicate wid maximum people from entire world. if writting is ur passion ,then giv it ur cent percent efforts . i m sending u 100gps as reward &b'coz u r improving so rating 4.5 to ur poem
a day poetry in so lucid manner! excellent effort. make 1 consideration 4 betterment
> always use words in poetry according 2 sound flow preferably not a single word again and again
>i hav created an wonderful item "ready to be confused". plz enjoy reading & send me ur review. in wait of ur quick response!
zoya, an excellent effort. i read ur story. some suggestions are as follows
> u r writing a story, don't b so formal. sometimes u can use funny or romantic ideas in between.
>always try 2 give enjoyful reading b'coz u r writing not 4 u but readers
>don't disturb flow of reading by using bulky words
subject of story is very good. enjoy writing
i hav created an wonderful item "ready to be confused". plz enjoy reading & send me ur review. in wait of ur quick response!
gupta sahab, i read ur various creations. i felt that in every writting u r tring 2 give a hidden massage. some time due 2 less exposure such great creations remain unreviewed.but really u are a good thinker. keep it on!
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