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Review of Night Dancing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)



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Night Dancing Open in new Window. (E)
Quick poem about the desperation of mental illness
#1972070 by Charlie ~ Author IconMail Icon


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*BulletG*First impression:I was drawn into reading this poem because of the title. "Night Dancing" was an intriguing thought and it filled my mind with instant imagination.

"It creeps upon you slowly
Over time, then suddenly." -I loved the first two lines itself! It was beautiful and mystical.

*BulletV*Theme: The theme revolved around one's mental state which wasn't normal. Personally, I related to my insomnia which fitted the poem as well.


*BulletR* sound patterns:I did not notice any sound patterns. It was more of a free verse which suited this poem. The lines flowed smoothly throughout the piece.

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*BulletG* Imagery: There were a few vivid imagery here. My favorite one has to be this one-

"It’s in bed with you.
Curled around your blankets,
Holding you closely.
Close your eyes and see it." -This verse gave me goosebumps and made me feel I am the one in bed with the shadows roaming around me. Nicely done!


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*BulletG* line breaks, meter, repetition: Since, this piece was a free verse, there isn't any meters and much repetition.

*BulletB* Errors: There isn't any technical errors!*CheckG*


*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*



*BulletG* Suggestions:I do not have any suggestions! It is lovely as it is!

*BulletB* Favorite lines: The last verse was my favorite!

"An eye roll, a loud sigh.
Hear that you don’t feel
How you feel.
Find out you are truly alone.
No one will go down with you." For some reason I felt it was powerful and the last line is so honest. No one will really go down with you is a truth in any situation in reality and life in general. It is your own fight and battle at the end of the day!

*BulletR* Overall impressions: I loved how this poem is honest and written in a very simple yet subtle manner. The struggle of having a mental disease is clearly portrayed here. The confusion and fear is painted in between the lines and the reader would definitely dive into the world of the helpless.

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review of Good Man's Shadow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Good Man's Shadow Open in new Window. (E)
Short and sweet poem
#1766792 by Warrior Poet Author IconMail Icon



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First impression:

Theme:The theme revolves around a good man's shadow. It generally speaks of how a good man has his own set of evil within him. Everyone has their options and when one chooses to be good, the bad attributes becomes their shadow.


*BulletR* sound patterns: There wasn't a distinct sound pattern in this piece. However, the poem still manages to capture a smooth flow through out the piece.

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*BulletG* line breaks, meter, repetition: There isn't any line breaks, meter or repetition this poem exactly follows.

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*BulletB* Errors: I did not notice any error in this piece! *CheckG*


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Meter/Rhyme/Structure: This poem is written in free verse and does not follow any meter, rhyme or structure.

*BulletG* Suggestions:I do no have suggestion for this poem. It is good as it is:)

*BulletB* Favorite lines: I like this line the most, "Dark and vague, the man muses."

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: This is indeed a wonderful read and I enjoyed it immensely. There is a genuine honesty in the poem which portrays truth in an unique way. Write on!

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review of Words  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Words Open in new Window. (E)
A contemplation
#1894384 by Turtle ~ KanyáthƐko:wa:h Author IconMail Icon



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*BulletB* First impression: This poem indeed has many layers to it as the more I read it, I felt the more I was uncovering more secrets of what the poet was trying to say. I have read it a few times to let the words itself settle within me.

*BulletG* Theme: The theme definitely revolves around the concept of word and beyond it. It reminds me of how someone can leave behind their legacy with their words.

*BulletV* voice, tone and diction: The diction was formal which complimented the first person's voice in the poem. The tone carried determination and seriousness to some extent.

*BulletR* sound patterns: There wasn't exactly a rhyme to this piece. Nonetheless, the free verse did justice on its own with as it flowed smoothly from one verse to another.

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*BulletG* Imagery: Mild imagery were used like,"tools will rust" and "ripple of a puddle".

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*BulletG* line breaks, meter, repetition: There isn't any line breaks, meter nor repetition.

*BulletB* Errors: There is no technical in this poem from my observation. *CheckG*


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*BulletG* Suggestions:I do not have any suggestion:) It is perfect as it is!

*BulletB* Favorite lines: My favorite lines has to be the last verse.

"Ages hence, as mountains
return to grains upon the shore –
part of me shall be here with you –
Words –
and nothing more"

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: All in all, this was a very lovely read. Made my Friday morning a wonderful one. The beginning of your first line embraced me immediately and carried me to the rest of the art piece. Write on!

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Author: E. Greycourt Author IconMail Icon

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First impression: I loved the title of this poem like piece. It depicts the dryness of the author's eyes.

Theme:The theme is revolved around how his eyes are dry.



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*BulletG* Imagery: The imagery used here was pretty vivid.

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*BulletB* Errors: I did not find any error!:) *CheckG*


*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*

Meter/Rhyme/Structure:

*BulletG* Suggestions:The piece is fine as it is!

*BulletB* Favorite lines:

"Moistened only by the morning dew, teardrops that sizzle out before they reach the sun"
*BulletR* Overall impressions:: I generally felt it was a simple and a genuine piece.

Write one!

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*
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Review of Oblivious  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Poem about death and nature
#1246295 by ~Ellen~7 yrs on WDC! Author IconMail Icon


Author: ~Ellen~7 yrs on WDC! Author Icon

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First impression: This poem made me think twice when I reached the last word- oblivious? I would say this is a simple and yet an extremely subtle piece.

Theme: The theme revolves around death in Serbian followed by nature. For some reason I feel the bird seems to be the main character here which defines the theme- caught between the blessing and the death.

*BulletV*voice, tone and diction: The voice was clearly written as a first person and the diction was formal through out. The tone was a mixture of joy and sorrow in some lines of the piece.

*BulletR*Sound patterns: There wasn't a distinct sound pattern here.

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*BulletG* Imagery: The imagery used here was powerful in my opinion. Even though the poem was fairly short the poet managed to paint the scenes on the reader's mind and impact them with the right emotions to really feel the poem.

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*BulletG* line breaks, meter, repetition: There wasn't any abrupt line breaks. Meter and repetition wasn't spotted in this piece.

*BulletB* Errors: There wasn't any technical errors found! *CheckG*


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*BulletG* Suggestions: I don't have any suggestions for this one! Its awesome as it is:)

*BulletB* Favorite lines:
'What haunts me is
the lone bird call caught between the blessing and the death--
a few notes, like angel dust, floating down from the trees above.'- This line was stunning. I absolutely loved it!

*BulletR* Overall impressions::I liked how you ended your poem with an interesting question. Was it oblivious that the bird was adding her blessing or otherwise? I still wonder.

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review of Bloomless Flower  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Bloomless Flower Open in new Window. (13+)
What is your take on it?
#1437887 by Kristi Author IconMail Icon


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First impression: I loved the title given to this beautiful poem. When I had my first read, I found this really sentimental and deep.

Theme: The theme revolves around an imagery of a bloomless flower. It was a metaphorical expression of one's emotion.

*BulletR*Sound patterns: There was a distinct rhyme scheme through out the poem which follows the pattern of aa|bb|bb|dd|ee.

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*BulletG* Imagery: I must say the imagery used here were vibrant and astounding. The first line itself took me off guard- "Trapped inside this tomb where resides my soul
Reeled in straight from the womb on baited pole."

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*BulletB*Errors: I have not found any error with this piece! Perfect *Delight* *CheckG*


*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*



*BulletG*Suggestions: I don't really have much suggestions to improve this piece. It seems great as it is:)

*BulletB* Favorite lines: My favorite lines are-"Frightened by thoughts that were brightened by hopes;
Tangled in knots and then dangled from ropes.' This line was utterly amazing. I loved how it portrayed the ups and the downs in life generally.

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: I felt this poem held powerful meaning if read several times. Each time the reader reads she/he will be able to take something different from it.

Congratulations for the well deserved ribbon!

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*



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Review of The Battle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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A Terzanelle.
#1966745 by April Desiree-I'm back! Author IconMail Icon


Author: April Desiree-I'm back! Author IconMail Icon

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*BulletR*First impression: Firstly, I am really sorry for the extremely late requested review. I have read this months back and I really loved how you created a magical story in just a few stanzas. It reminded me of one of the battles in a movie. I can't remember which one though. The battle between the witches and the farmers sounds really familiar for some reason.

Theme: The theme revolves around the battle that awaits the kingdom. The knights and farmers awaits for the upcoming storm.

*BulletV* voice, tone and diction: The voice was from a third perspective and the diction used here was awesome.

*BulletR* sound patterns: The sound patterns here was rather musical and I loved the rhymes that took place now and then.

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*BulletG* Imagery: The imagery used here was very beautiful as I jumped from one scene to another. I felt the shoes of the farmers who were waiting patiently to fight the upcoming battle!

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*BulletB* Errors: A perfect piece with no technical errors! *CheckG*

*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*


*BulletG* Suggestions: I don't really have any suggestion to improve this piece. There is definitely a reason why you won the third prize for this one :)

*BulletB* Favorite lines:
'The shadows dance across the pale moonlight,
and winds of change are blowing; lo! The storm!
For ‘tis the hour to bear arms and fight.' - The first stanza was so mysterious and captivating that I fell in love with it immediately.

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: I really enjoyed reading this poem dear. Thank you so much for sharing it with me and asking for my opinion.*Inlove*

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

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Review of Memories  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Title:
 Memories Open in new Window. (E)
A Swannet.
#1965781 by April Desiree-I'm back! Author IconMail Icon


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*BulletR*First impression: I always love titles that are named 'Memories' as I always aspect to read someone's life story in depth. When I first read this piece I recall my own friendship with my childhood friend. Just that I never faced betrayals or experienced any form of backstabbing among my close friends. This poem gives an insight to the both bright and dark side of one's friendship.

Theme:The theme revolves about a childhood friend and the poet is reminiscing those days that she surely treasured but like everything else-it had to come to an end.

*BulletV* voice, tone and diction: This poem is written in first person perspective and uses a formal diction. I feel the tone was rather sad and negative. Nonetheless, the poet ended the poem with hope of moving on and she knows life has always more to give at the end of the day.

*BulletR* sound patterns: The rhyme scheme of this poem follows a pattern of abba|cddc|effe|gg. This added a lovely melody to the poem and I enjoyed the smooth flow immensely.

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*BulletG* Imagery: Words like,'show','dance's move','whirlwind,'throttle','bottle','typhoon', and 'storm' made up an impactful imagery.

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*BulletG* line breaks, meter, repetition: There were no specific line breaks,meter and repetition that I noticed.

*BulletB* Errors: I have not noted any errors in this wonderful piece! *CheckG*


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*BulletG* Suggestions: I honestly felt something missing in this piece.
I expected it to be more powerful I guess. I am not sure how you are going to do that.
Perhaps, change a few words here and there to make it more stronger words? Nevertheless, I loved the simplicity of it. The reason I am expecting more is because I read your others poems before which always left me feeling fully satisfied. If you know what I mean:) Just my humble opinion.

*BulletB* Favorite lines: My favorite lines would be,-
'Her life was a whirlwind, she went full-throttle,
and I, sucked into her typhoon.'
It was the line that made me stop and re read it again to fully absorb the tragedy.

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: I am actually pretty amazed at how you portrayed a story with just a few words. The scene were playing in front of me as I read the poem. It was really so wonderful reading your poem again. Its indeed a sweet escape from my dull university schedule that I have now.

Thank you so much for giving me the privilege again to indulge in your work again.

I wish you all the best for the contest dear:)

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Lot of Love from this tiny *Heart* ,
Immortal~

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Review of Treehouse  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Title:
Treehouse Open in new Window. (13+)
A sonnet written for "Get the Picture"
#1687783 by Ravenwand, Rising Star! Author IconMail Icon


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*BulletG*First impression: Personally, I am really fond of tree houses. So once I read the title, I was expecting to be brought back to an old tree house and this piece really did its justice of that experience. Thank you for taking your reader by the hand and giving her a lovely break from reality.

*BulletB*Theme:The theme revolves around the memories that were created in a tree house. The comfortable ambience of an oak tree is perfectly portrayed in this piece.

*BulletV*voice, tone and diction:The diction used here was formal and positive. The tone here felt really peaceful and vibrant with the colors the poem displays.

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*BulletG* Imagery: The imagery used here is very profound and wonderful. Words used like,'limbs of oak','sentinel of grace','soft blue flowers','Morning Glories','head stone' and 'living skin'.


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*BulletB* Errors: I did not find any errors in this piece. *CheckG*

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Meter/Rhyme/Structure:This was a stunning piece following the shakespearean sonnet. The rhyme here was smooth and it flowed naturally. I did not notice any repetition here.


*BulletG* Suggestions:I don't have any suggetions for this piece. It is perfect as it is.

*BulletB* Favorite lines:

'I clear the leaves away from your head stone
And leave the woods as I came in, alone'-This last line gave me chiils.


*BulletR* Overall impressions:: The first line of the poem instantly grabbed hold of my heart as it began to reminisce its own memories. Gradually as I read on, the words expressed made lovely visions in my mind and carried me from my present to somewhere I would love to be when in search of tranquility.

'We learned the ways of life among the boards
While yielding to the gravity and need'- Another stunning line that I fell in love with *Inlove*

I think I can read this piece several times and take something magnificent away with each embrace.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
I enjoyed it immensely.
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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

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Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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 Weighed in the Balance Open in new Window. (13+)
A poem about disappointing someone, totally.
#1111607 by Iva Lilly Durham Author IconMail Icon


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First impression: I felt the betrayal entangled in the lines that the poet has constructed. It was evident and I perceived it easily.

Theme: The theme is about the poet being let down by someone.

*BulletV* voice, tone and diction:The voice of the poem was first perspective. The tone was remorseful and the diction was perfect with the wise word choice.

*BulletR* sound patterns:There was a alternate rhyme patterns in most lines. Though it is not constant, the pattern gave a rhythm to this piece!

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*BulletG*Imagery: Words used like, 'seesaw side','hanging tree' and 'cuts'gave a good imagery in this piece.

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*BulletB* Errors:I did not find any technical errors in this piece! *CheckG*

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*BulletG* Suggestions:I loved how the poem is and don't really have nay suggestions.

*BulletB* Favorite lines:
'To never please and not quite know why
is an awful hard sentence, no mercy,
no parole, imprisoned, you die.'-I feel this line was very distinct and it left me feeling intrigued.

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: I felt the poet was able to fully express the unfairness and sorrow in the situation of being disappointed.
The word choice was great and I loved how the stanzas were broken into.
I always like when a poem is simple yet very subtle.
Hence, I feel this deserves five stars rating:)

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review of Son  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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An acrostic.
#1954366 by April Desiree-I'm back! Author IconMail Icon


Author: April Desiree-I'm back! Author Icon

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First impression:

Theme: The theme of this poem is about the poet's son and how she will return to him one day.

*BulletV* voice, tone and diction: The voice of the poem is first perspective and the tone of this piece is quite saddening. Is filled with remorse and longing.

*BulletR* sound patterns:This was written in free verse so there wasn't any specific sound patterns.

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*BulletG* line breaks, meter, repetition: The line breaks here was pretty neat

*BulletB* Errors: I did not find any technical errors. *CheckG*

*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*


*BulletG* Suggestions: I feel that the sixth line is quite long and it disrupts the flow of the poem. It might flow better if you break it into two lines?

*BulletB* Favorite lines:
'every day I pledge, my son, I will return.'-I liked the sincerity in this line and the love behind these words.

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: I felt the poem has more potential to bloom to portray the message of coming back to the poet's son. The description of the poem states is an acrostic poem? I did not exactly get the initials if that's the case. You may want to enlighten me on that note. Other than that, I think the poem is sweet and loving! Just missing that little something which I am sure you will be able to add on sooner or later.

Thank you for asking me to give my insight on this personal poem of yours:)

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

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Review of My Soulmate  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Title:
 My Soulmate  Open in new Window. (13+)
There is someone with whom you have an intimate connection, a deep and natural affinity...
#1950622 by Claude H. A. Simpson Author IconMail Icon


Author: Claude H. A. Simpson Author Icon

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First impression: A lovely poem!

Theme: About someone special and close.

*BulletV* voice, tone and diction: The voice in this poem was first perspective. The tone was loving and compassionate.

*BulletR* sound patterns:This poem followed a rhyme scheme of aabb|ccdd|eeff.

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*BulletB* Errors: I did not fine any technical errors here! *CheckG*


*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*

Meter/Rhyme/Structure:

*BulletR* Overall impressions:: This was a lovely read! I liked how this love and intimacy was portrayed in a simple way. There was sincerity in the lines. The rhymes gave it a wonderful melody and the choice of words to compliment this poem was great!

Thank you for sharing this with us!

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Love*Heart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review of Empty Chair  Open in new Window.
Review by lmmortal Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey there!

I came for a random read and stumbled upon your wonderful poem.
I liked how this was simple yet so subtle.
The title,'Empty Chair,' is perfect for this piece.
Even though this was written in free verse, it was well structured and the flow from one line to the other was smooth!
I love the message that this poem portrays!

Thank you for sharing this with us!:)

Love,
Immortal~


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Prosper Snow,

I loved how you expressed yourself here. Is really beautiful!
You are a strong woman and that is very evident in your writing!

*UmbrellaB**UmbrellaG**UmbrellaO**UmbrellaP**UmbrellaR*


You have given yourself a wonderful nickname and your real name is just as stunning! *Smile* I enjoyed reading this letter to yourself.

Thank you for sharing something so personal!

Love,
Immortal~


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Review of To The End  Open in new Window.
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Title:
 To The End Open in new Window. (E)
Is it the beginning of the end or simply an end to the beginning?
#1754329 by kiwi-warz Author IconMail Icon


How I came across this item:I was browsing through the history genre and I stumbled upon your poem.


First impression: This is so incredibly beautiful.
On the first read I was already asking myself, 'So is this the beginning of an end or just another beginning?'

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Theme: The theme is comprehending if is the start of something that is going to end or just a beginning. A very controversial theme I must say.


Meter/rhyme/structure: There was abab|cdcd|efef
rhyme scheme that was consistent throughout the three stanzas.

*CarP**CarR**CarV**CarB**CarO*



Grammar/spelling/punctuation: I did not notice any technical errors!*CheckG*


My favorite line: Organized, we struggle on a crusade to survive.- I felt that thins line gets the reader thinking what the poet is trying to say.

*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*


Overall: I should say that I liked reading this piece as I had to read it couple of times to perceive the meaning in my own way.
It is always wonderful to ponder about what message the poet is trying to convey
in the poem.

I enjoyed it and I shall rate it a 4.5 star!*Star**Star**Star**Star**HalfStar*

Love,
Immortal~



*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review of Time will tell  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title:
 Time will tell Open in new Window. (E)
tick tock! (written for contest - 28 words)
#1754539 by R. Wynters Author IconMail Icon


How I came across this item:I was browsing through the history genre and came across your poem!

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First impression: This is so creative.

Theme: The theme is about the very essential thing, time.

Imagery: Words used like 'stretch and shrink' did add up to mild imagery which was created in this 28 lines poem*Smile*

*CarP**CarR**CarV**CarB**CarO*



Meter/rhyme/structure: This seems like acrostic poem so there isn't any rhyme or meter. Though I must say there was a smooth rhythm to this piece which made it a wonderful read.

Grammar/spelling/punctuation: I did not notice any technical errors.

*LeafBr**LeafG**LeafO**LeafR* *LeafY*


My favorite line:
'Endures,runs at a
Nebulous
Tempo.'- I felt this was a unique way to describe time!*Delight*

Overall: I am actually very impressed how you expressed such a vast thing like time in just 28 words.
The word choice was perfect to depict the thoughts in this poem!
A lovely read indeed.

I would give it a five star! *Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*

Love*SuitHeart* ,
Immortal~

*PoseyB* *PoseyO* *PoseyP* *PoseyR**PoseyV*


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Review of History  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title:
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Memories of a Fall
#1472160 by starvinartis Author IconMail Icon


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How I came across this item:I was browsing through the history genre and stumbled upon your poem *Smile*


First impression: This is a very heartfelt piece that reminds me of my own past.

Theme: The theme is a beautiful one which portrays a memory which took place in fall.

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Imagery: There were really good imagery used here like,'witchy smile','battered old guitar','soft shadows', and 'tear stained noted.'

*CarP**CarR**CarV**CarB**CarO*


Meter/rhyme/structure: There was rhymed in certain lines but this piece is wrote in free verse as a whole *LeafO*


Grammar/spelling/punctuation: I did not really find much technical errors here. However, I feel using more periods in this piece would give a smoother flow. For the last three verse I I think it will be good if you capitalized the first letter.*FlowerY*


My favorite line:
'the candles sent soft shadows
like pictures on your wall'-This has to be my favorite line! Love the vision that was created in my mind*FlowerB*

Overall:This piece is written beautifully portraying the poet reminiscing her past. The atmosphere was eloquently described that made me feel that I was in a candle lit room. The way this poem ended was with sadness as the last two line made my heart ache.

'if loving you was what it took
to learn how to love me'

I would rate this a 4 star!*Star**Star**Star**Star*

Thank you so much for sharing this with us! I really enjoyed dwelling in your world.

Love*SuitHeart* ,
Immortal~


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Review of Don't Forget  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Title: Don't Forget

Author: The Reaper Author Icon

How I came across this item:I was browsing through history genre and I stumbled upon this lovely piece!*Smile*


First impression: This is a simple poem about our past which is portrayed very eloquently.

Theme: The theme is focused on how we should learn from our past. History in everyone's life is very essential to reflect upon.*Treefall3*


Imagery: There is not much imagery used in this poem for is portrayed in a more 'matter of fact' manner.

Meter/rhyme/structure: I believe this was written in a free verse as I did not notice any rhyme or meter. I liked the fact you managed to portray your thoughts in just a few words!*BurstBR*

Grammar/spelling/punctuation: I feel the last line needs to be fixed.

'If forgot, we are doomed'- I think forgot should be changed to forgotten?

Another line that needs work is, 'It holds sway on our actions'

It might be just me but 'holds sway' didn't quite make sense to me. I apologize if I am wrong.

That should be it. I did not spot any other technical errors.

Overall: I think this piece has more potential to grow and bloom! Nonetheless, I liked reading this and loved how you pointed out your message in a poem!

Keep writing on!

Love,
Immortal~


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Review of A CRUEL WORLD  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Title: A Cruel World

Author: {susuer:somethoughts}

How I came across this item: I was browsing through the history genre and I stumbled upon this piece!*Smile*

First impression: This is a very powerful and bold poem.
After the first read I nodded my head agreeing to the truth. Indeed, the world is a beautiful place but is also made with filth. Filth is mostly from us humans. *Tree2*

Theme: A very important theme about the world that is cruel and the search for a better place. Something we ponder about in a daily basis.*LeafY*


Imagery: I think words like, 'cruel', 'stench','blood', 'dark' and 'cold' gave a boost to the imagery here.


Meter/rhyme/structure:The rhyme scheme of abab|cdcd|efef|ghgh| is very evident. The rhyme flowed smoothly and gave the poem a good rhythm!*Delight*


Grammar/spelling/punctuation:I did not find any technical errors here!*Thumbsupr*

My favorite line:
'I hope he doesn’t see my life as a disgrace
And I soar as high as the heavens is my flight'-I really loved the last two lines. It was a lovely conclusion to the poem!*FlowerR*

Overall:I felt the poem speaks of reality in a very simple yet in a very subtle way. I really enjoyed reading this piece.
Thank you so much for sharing this with us!

Love,
Immortal~



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Title: A walk alone with me

Author: ShellySunshine Author Icon

How I came across this item: I was browsing through the history genre and stumbled upon this poem!


First impression: This is a beautiful poem expressed in an evocative manner. I found it simple yet very subtle.


Theme: The theme is about the poet walking alone in her journey of life. Which was specified that it was her youth.


Meter/rhyme/structure: I believe this was written in free verse as I did not notice and rhyme or meter. Nonetheless, there was sorrowful melody to this poem which I loved.


Grammar/spelling/punctuation: I did not notice any technical errors*Smile*


My favorite line: I think my favorite line would be, 'Burned out houses, shattered glass, scattered debris'
It was filled with imagery that made my vision more profound.

Overall: I really liked how this whole poem told a story of a girl in her youth in just a few verses. The words used here were very distinct and eloquent. The sorrow and emptiness was evident within the lines of this poem. Thank you for sharing this with us. I enjoyed reading it!

Love,
Immortal~


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Review of Mourning Dove  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Mourning Dove Open in new Window. (E)
The path that led me to this place...
#1953327 by April Desiree-I'm back! Author IconMail Icon


Author: April Desiree-I'm back! Author Icon

I am here to do the honors of reviewing another great piece from your world! I have never really heard about this form of sonnet so I had to do my research before reviewing this! Thanks to you I learnt about a new poem form which is rarely used by modern poets! I should say job well done for this one! *Delight*

First impression: This is so incredibly beautiful. I had to read at least 5 times to totally capture all the essence of this poem and imagine the whole scene in my mind *BigSmile*

Rating(/5):*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*

Theme: The theme is really stunning which depicts this stranded waif wandering in a forest and eventually colliding with the city-dwelling Mourning Dove.

Rating(/5):*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*

Imagery: I think you did a splendid job with imagery in this piece as all my senses became alive. It felt like you took me by the hand and made me be that stranded waif for a moment and I was walking in his trails.

Some lines that gave me chills because they were so unique and well-composed:

'so harsh, as leaving welts upon my back'

It was simple and yet so subtle. Perfect!*PoseyY*

Rating(/5): *Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*

Meter/rhyme/structure: I think the rhyme and structure of this Spenserian sonnet was graceful.
The rhymes flowed so well and blended like silk with the poem.

The rhyme scheme of a b a b | b c b c | c d c d | e e was evident!:)

But I found one line that seems to lack one syllable.

'Careful to retrace my fresh, new track,'

I might be wrong though. Do correct me if I am. This is the first time I am dealing with a Spenserian sonnet*Pthb*

Rating(/5):*Star**Star**Star**Star**HalfStar*

Grammar/spelling/punctuation: I did not find any other technical errors*Smile*

Rating(/5):*Star**Star**Star**Star**Star*


My favorite line: 'that leaves have turned from green to gray to black.'
I like how instantly this line made me vision the colors of leaves changing. *Leaf2g**Leaf2br*

Overall: I really loved this piece as it made me imagine a little homeless boy feeling the agony of being alone and stranded in the middle of nowhere. The first few lines were portraying his thoughts and pain before he was distracted by the crack he heard. I like how the whole scenario took a turn.

From 'impending doom yet sets upon me: no!' to 'Careful to retrace my fresh, new track,'

This poem is a mixture of sadness and hope. A wonderful feel indeed.
Thank you so much for sharing this with us, April!
It was indeed a remarkable sonnet:) It definitely made my evening!*LeafR*

Overall Rating(/5):*Star**Star**Star**Star**HalfStar*

Lots of Love,
Immortal


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Review of Dear God  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Jemilo,

I am here to review from the Historical League!
This is such a heartfelt poem depicting a prayer of a soldier as stated.
There was a distinct rhyme in most lines which brought about a sorrowful melody.
The words used here were so profound.

'Dying in his crimson pool'-I loved this line*Inlove*

I did not find any technical errors and felt it was perfect the way it is written. Hence, I shall give a full rating for this one:)

Do keep writing on!

Love,
Immortal

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Review of PAST  Open in new Window.
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Hey Billy,

I am here to review from the Historical League~
This short poem is indeed meaningful as it depicts about one's past.
Passing dreams- This makes me imagine one's past turning into memorable vision and turning into dreams.

Always floating- Dreams and visions of the past indeed always keeps floating.
Time to time we reminisce the time long gone. A time we cherish, a time when we learnt something valuable.

'Slowly down

Times eternal river' -I perceived that the memories slowly headed down to the eternal river where these times will forever be treasured.

A lovely poem indeed.

I enjoyed reading this:)

Thank you for sharing this with us.

Love,
Immortal~

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Review of Colored People  Open in new Window.
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Hey there!

I am here to give a review from the Historical League~
This is a wonderful poem regarding slavery and about the sufferings of the black.
I did not notice any rhyme or meter so I suppose this piece was written in free verse.
The voice in the poem seems like a black is portraying his/her emotions here.
I feel the words used here is simple yet subtle.

'After hundreds of years of manual labor
How dare they lie and say they are our savior.' -There was anger which I felt in this line.
It is clear that unfairness was present for a long time for the blacks.
I like how you concluded in the end that don't let your skin stand in the way.
A reminder we should all have once in awhile.

Racism is indeed against humanity.

Thank you for sharing such a important poem with us.

Love.
Immortal~

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Review of Reality's Penalty  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hey there,

I am here to review from the History League!
I really love the title which perfectly suited this piece, 'Reality's Penalty.'*Thumbsupr*
The first and second stanza was depicting the men who built the massive structure.
I felt the third stanza was true about the age of confidence and how reality showed otherwise.

'Construct the walls and act as though
the walls can never fail.'- Yes indeed, a fact they neglected.

This was lovely read that retells the story in a more realistic manner.

Thank you for sharing this with us!:)

Love,
Immortal~


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