I did really enjoy this a lot, at first I was confused but the more I read, the more I understood. I do hope you keep writing. The only thing I would say other than that is try not to jump through characters as quickly. Gradually introduce them, such like going from the aunt and uncle to the grandparents. Other than that I thought it was quite lovely.
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