Impression: Your short story of a woman who chooses to live alone and has been alone since both parents passed on at age 17, she's grown used to the quiet. However, she doesn't mind if she adds mechanical sounds, just noises to help fill the void, the space while she lives in her home. After she is alone, on her first night, some weird things start happening..but she sees a trend, a theme from a movie seen by millions of families. She will unmask whoever is pranking her house, invading her life...and the game is afoot.
What I loved: I thought this story did a good job with showing a differnt minded woman who won't be driven from the home she's bought but only has a mind to unmask the offender. Good going for her!
What needs work: Nothing needs rework.
Final thoughts: I definitely found myself on the sofa cheering for this character and I'm sure instead of running screaming away, the ghost or person who is trying to drive her away will find themselves homeless instead. This determined story will be a great read that I hope you enjoy as much as I did.
Impression: This short story is full of excitement, sci-fi drama with a husband and wife team who strumbled upon a billionaire's property viewing his hidden tech, this puts them in a bad place. The billionaire lays out the parameters for their unhindered stay on his property as long as they keep their eyes out of his private work. As always, they comply until they don't and things take a turn that might change the course of their lives...permanently.
What I loved: I can appreciate a curious husband and wife team but it's amazing that this command cannot be maintained due to their overly bored nature. Adventure awaits!
What needs work: What a fun and twists and turns this story weaves for the scientific duo. I will keep it brief to say that I think you will enjoy this read. This lively story will be a great read that I hope you enjoy as much as I did.
Final thoughts: Well, as it is often said, curiousity killed the cat, it often kills grant funding because the scientist husband and wife duo forgot the rule: he who finds the gold makes the rules and they were unwilling to just listen. That stuck out for me that often if you are unwilling to listen and just do what is said, maybe, just maybe things can work out. But we know, this story, left on a clift, doesn't end well for the duo.
It kept me thinking as I hope it will for them, which means it was interesting. Hope the readers will find this work intriguing too.
Impression: Your short story is full of surprises, bullies (no way!), and a tentacle monster that happens to help those in a tough jam. But that's later in the story...retribution is swift and final. The flow of this story is solid, stays focused and integrates with fluidity, the photo prompt for the contest.
What I loved: When the story involves a good ending for the down trodden person just living life. Not causing trouble but just hated for no reason but whatever the real reason, justice is served.
What needs work: Nothing needs rework.
Final thoughts: What a solid moving story that I found myself cheering for the one who survived the evil trap only to live on cured of the fear of water, and now with a new found love for the lake. This wonderful story will be a great read that I hope you enjoy as much as I did.
Impression: Your short story is a delicious little gem of story with a sick mom and her only son burdened with school and her care as its not enough to help heal her sickness. Enters a young man, deemed a Warlock who claims good intentions until the son's in a desperate situation that calls for immediate help. There's twists and turns but good wins out in the end. A pleasant story with a feel good ending that utilizes the photo prompt with ease.
What I loved: When an evil plan doesn't work as planned and the person who seeks love and family wins. There's just not enough of it in the world for it to get boring.
What needs work: Nothing needs rework.
Final thoughts:Love saves the day and good comes out on top. Family bonds are stronger than death and love wins over all. This hope building story will be a great read that I hope you enjoy as much as I did.
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Impression: Your short story is full of angst and confusion for a joyful time never known due to jealousy and bitterness. There is such sadness for the man who is driven to madness, the man who only wanted to wed the woman he loved. The story took such a dramatic turn that I forgot about the lake house. No, I jest. The story prompt was used beautifully and wa intergrated into the story line.
What I loved: I love a good story that draws you inside and won't let you leave. This is how invested I was by second paragraph. I did feel that he was unfairly charged with being a "maniac" though he just disappeared. The home no longer had any value nor would he want to stay in the place where death made an indelible mark.
What needs work: I didn't see anything that required rework.
Final thoughts: A very haunting story that used the photo prompt with relish and left the reader wanting more. This wonderful story will be a great read that I hope you enjoy as much as I did.
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Impression: Your short story sets the scene of hope for a better future from a past that was hard and unforgiving. Through a series of financial exchanges, the family's fortune changed for the better...but, well, I guess this is where the title came into play. It's a bittersweet feeling story that desperately tries to educate the viewer, along with the family, that some higher force was calling for their lives but they failed to heed the signals in time. I felt tense throughout this story and I think that others will too.
What I loved: I enjoyed the story's pace and imagery. I even enjoyed the view of the lake front house. That's all I can say that I loved though. It was well written and that is always a plus.
What needs work: Nothing.
Final thoughts: Tension, suspense, sadness and evil spirits all have a part in this buoyantly moving story. It is a story you'll love to hate but sometimes that's what a good writer does with their characters or villains. This heart stopping story will be a great read that I hope you enjoy as much as I did.
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Impression: This short story of a haunted island mansion that reappears once a year and its very sighting means another set of the town's residents will disappear. Enter four kids determined to find answers, even if their lives are forfeit from finding the truth. Tension is in the air, curiosity is in play but danger, grave danger in store for the curious kids. Not sure if they will succeed but they will be forever known as the brave four!
What I loved: I loved that the kids banded together to investigate the spooky haunted mansion, all were brave, even if it placed them in harms way, they had to know.
What needs work: Nothing I read needed rework.
Final thoughts: Adventure is in the air but four brave kids step forward for justice. I love a good story where the young kids fight a monster...will they succeed? You have to read this great story to find out but you'll want to, yes, you'll want to.
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Impression: This is the story of a young deer that learns to act on his desire, face the threat of death but succeed with his life, and courage intact. This deer truly quenched his thirst today. Through this success he can go forward bravely many more times into the crocodile's realm.
What I loved: I loved the imagery of the deer stepping into crocodile terrain to drink a few gulps of water and rejoicing at the end with its reward. Felt real nice to see the deer win so soundly at the end.
What needs work: Nothing needs rework.
Final thoughts: This was a feel good story of quenching not just a physical thirst but motivationally, it encourages others to step out and face life's challenges and win.
When you stay thirsty, you always seek to quench life's thirst.
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Impression: You said a whole lot in a few words and that is a difficult thing to achieve. Most people run from death but this character we see here has had many interactions and is not afraid and it would seem, they are "friends", though who is a friend of Death?
What I loved: I really enjoyed the quirky mood of this story. Death lets your protagonist down, many times but she still waits for him to visit her. Very interesting look at Death from this perspective. The cat, Pete, was also an intriguing addition.
What needs work: I didn't see anything that needed work.
Final thoughts: I thought this was an imaginative use of the prompt and really integrated into the theme of this story. I definitely see the idea from the prompt in this story that the truth is really not desired here. Great story!
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Impression: This is a honest reflection into a world mental enlightenment and a grappling with normal life fallacies.
What I loved: The honesty behind your work. You really want your readers to understand you.
What needs work: I found nothing that needed rework.
Final thoughts: Your story beautifully captures the raw emotions, triumphs, and setbacks experienced by the protagonist, leaving your readers with a profound understanding of the complexities surrounding mental health. You and Van Gogh are distant cousins, bound together in the spirit world.
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Impression: An intriguing view into a life that was transformed by overhearing one thing that set off this main character into a life full of living, adventure and wealth. To go from a life lived through fictional characters to you living the life others only heard of.
What I loved: Her transformation from a perceived matron into a desirable woman draping the arms of wealthy men. That works for me!
What needs work: There is nothing from this story that needs rework.
Final thoughts: This is a really surprising foray into a new world full of new possibilities. It took me by surprise but that is what I get for having a standard expectation of a really good character.
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Impression: This story is a great story of a person who has a gift for massage but deeper than that, for understanding the complex needs of a female from all of the years he'd been raised with his three sisters.
What I loved: This character never focused his activities on himself but on the needs of the people whose life he touched.
What needs work: There is nothing that needs rework in this entry.
Final thoughts: This introspective narrative, authored by a sensitive and insightful writer, beautifully captures the far-reaching impact of human connection and compassion. Your story really caught me with its wonderfully charming message and I just fell for it.
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Impression: This story of two young filly horses called Morgan were of a horse that allowed their master to care for them and the other, got less good treatment due to its resistance to letting anyone care for them. It was a useful to include these for illustration.
What I loved: I liked this one as much as I had to devour it swiftly for its length.
What needs work: There is nothing from this story that needs rework.
Final thoughts: You beautifully weave together the contrasting journeys of two captivating protagonists. This meticulously crafted tale takes readers on an emotional rollercoaster, delving deep into the complexities of horse nature and the choices we make.
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Impression: A story of a space being named Hancron who is enjoying his life, and the other DeathBringers want both him and the other DeathBringers estinguished. A sci fi journey into mayhem and death.
What I loved: The horror and intensity of the DeathBringer who brought death to many victims.
What needs work: The story does not need any rework.
Final thoughts: This spine-chilling narrative takes readers on a heart-pounding rollercoaster ride through a universe plagued by an unimaginable entity, the DeathBringer, whose sole purpose is to inflict death upon its helpless victims.
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Impression: Strayed from Normalcy, never coming back story is a captivating and thought-provoking journey that takes readers on a rollercoaster ride of emotions. The author masterfully weaves a narrative filled with unexpected twists and turns, pushing the boundaries of what it means to lead a conventional life.
What I loved: The emotions that are showed in this story really explain determination and insistence on never returning to a normal life.
What needs work: Nothing in this story needs rework.
Final thoughts: The moral of this story: You can believe in something small, and turn it into something big, quote from the author. This spellbinding narrative takes readers on a journey they never anticipated, venturing far from the realm of normalcy and thoroughly exploring the consequences of such a decision.
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Impression: The protagonist, a skilled and determined female operative codenamed Green Dragon, personifies strength and resilience. Her character development throughout the story is truly commendable, as we witness her growth and unyielding determination to complete her mission successfully. It is a solid story and really kept me interested till the last word.
What I loved: I really enjoyed the movement of this story. It was crisp, it was intriguing and I stayed involved.
What needs work: There is nothing from this story that needs rework.
Final thoughts: This story presents an enthralling tale of espionage, centered around a female operative on a high-stakes mission for the esteemed Agency. This riveting narrative combines action, suspense, and a sprinkle of mystery to deliver a captivating read.
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Impression: This story is an interesting take on the quotation prompt as I am searching for the area where this meshes with prompt. I will say that it is a beautiful writing on the month of November, which I happen to love as a month. it is a special month that usually ushers in the snow and frost and snowmen. It is a great month and would be amazing to spend in Norway, as you discuss, in November.
What I loved: I loved thinking about the mountains of snow to see in a country like Norway. It's magical, it's cold and fluffy snow is everywhere. This story really brought this out for me.
What needs work: There is nothing from this writing for rework.
Final thoughts: November, one of my fave month's of the year, is a special place to be in the country of Norway. The very cold nights, the glasses of vodka to stay warm and the beautiful countryside all around.
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Impression: For your Dear Me entry, you took a very clever outlook at this letter by playing around with the title and working into the letter, rather cleverly. I enjoyed how your outlook for goal setting was with identifying which goals to initiate, to propagate, in this upcoming year. I also enjoyed the words you made out of the contest title and how much it worked within the framework of this letter for goal setting.
What I loved: I loved DARE ME, E-DREAM and RE-MADE...how fun this was to enjoy a clever mind at work.
What needs work: Nothing needs rework in this entry.
Final thoughts: I have watched your writing through the years and really was blown away by this whimsical entry. How fantastic that you chose to enjoy your entry and submit what you found interesting in this contest. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
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Impression: I thought your entry was youthful and full of content that was full of intent and action! I considered your insertion of the acronyms SFW (macrophilian) and (growth)RP without a side appendix of the explanation of unfamiliar interests that require a bit of dissection if used in your contest entry. I stumbled a bit but all in all, I understood that you are forging through to reattach yourself to fans (and gain "new" fans) as your content grows in 2023.
What I loved: I loved your energy. You wrote through these changes, you entered your Dear Me entry and you "Dared to the challenge" and this is part of the hallmarks to success.
What needs work: Sorry but I think I stated that your content might need to offer an appendix or just simply state what the acronym means for the others.
Final thoughts: Again, I love your enthusiasm, your energy and your face to the wind as you "grow" again and you set a date of intention for this plan. This is a very good outline and I do wish you the best!
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Impression: What a fun inspiring letter to oneself to goal setting for 2023. Your willingness to lay bare the story count over the years the years is encouraging to the readers of your honest letter and myself. Your goal count is rigorous but this is just my small minded opinion of actual story writing. These are achievable numbers from my unlearned count.
What I loved: I loved your humility in full disclosure on some areas where you wanted to see improvement and you did not shy away to save face. Your bravery will not go unrewarded.
What needs work: There was nothing in your entry that I thought needed rework.
Final thoughts: The final goals you decided on showed a management style that is flexible and adaptable where necessary. It was a most beautiful part of the Dear Me letter to yourself and I really enjoyed reading it.
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Impression: Your entry for the Dear Me contest attempted to outline a plan for 2023. It embodied a whole lot of emotional states though you summarized it in one line: work on addressing your trauma. That is an interesting goal, along with your new city advisory committee positions and work in the city of Minneapolis to help beautify the community. I thought your outline was a grand endeavor but one that I think you will achieve in 2023.
What I loved: I loved your energy. I think that in modifying your commitments and ensuring you are involving self care in the various forms it unfolds, you are actively seeking to achieve your goals. Goal completion is a thing that requires energy and commitment and I think you have this.
What needs work: There is nothing in your Dear Me entry that needs rework.
Final thoughts: I think with this strength of heart and mind, and an intent for goal completion, you will finish more than not in 2023. This is looking to be your year.
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Impression: In your Dear Me entry for this year, I can say that those dust bunnies are far far away from settling on this adventuresome letter full of directed goal setting. I think your disclosure in the not so positive areas shows your agreeability and likability. What wonderful writing endeavors you secured and the future holds much possibility.
What I loved: I loved the honesty and directed outline in your letter. The goals are factual and directed. The writing focus really helps to work as a compass for the journey ahead.
What needs work: Nothing in this writing needs rework.
Final thoughts: What a positive and delightful letter to spur you forward, to remind you to beware of the dust bunnies that want to cloud your life, complicate it and you are moving in a active direction. Best wishes in your pursuits for 2023.
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Impression: For your Dear Me entry, you celebrate the fact that you are not aspiring achieve any new life pursuits or goals. You are simply looking forward to enjoying the time you have, the location you are settled in and the surrounding area. This is a fantastic goal that many never get to enjoy as they are busy working or "living" but never smell any good parts of life prior to dying.
What I loved: I love the freedom with which you submitted your entry knowing that you are not concerned about goal setting at all. You are interested in life enhancement, in whichever manner, it presents itself to you.
What needs work: Your Dear Me entry does not need rework.
Final thoughts: I always look for a surprise entry and this one surprised me with its openness and agreeableness. 2023 will be an interesting year for you, I think. Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
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Impression: For your Dear Me entry for this month, what is awesome is how you lay out eight or nine different activities, blogs and ports that you use to help you achieve your goals for 2023. You also lay out the issue of your health and this is not a matter than defies being ignored. You must take care of yourself, proactively, or the rest will fall to the wayside. It is good that you recognize this fact and endeavor to keep this in check so the rest can come together.
What I loved: I loved how succinctly you laid out the links to the various items that are used in goal actualization and these goals have dates for achievement. Your knowledge that faith is a major part of achieving these goals is also a positivity.
What needs work: Nothing in your entry needs rework.
Final thoughts: With future outlook so close on the horizon, how fortuitous that many of these ideas are falling together. I do wish you the best in this contest.
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Impression: Your Dear Me entry is a fantastic foray into the goal reflection of a previous year (2022) and the hopes of the following year (2023). I thought your outlines were clear and easy to follow and I loved your Character link and definitely have to read more of your writing.
What I loved: I loved your willingness to self disclose and share this journey in full display is beautiful thing. It is a rare quality I've seen from successful writers.
What needs work: Your Dear Me entry does not need any rework.
Final thoughts: I very much enjoyed your Dear Me letter and know that this was one of the better entries from this month. You have a great heart for things and I think you will achieve the goals you outlined for the upcoming year.
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