I have never reviewed before so forgive me if I say the wrong words.
I liked the story, I needed a little more depth with the characters. The writing was good, strong, nice sentences. I wonder if you couldn't put in more description, where this conversation takes place, the pain on their faces, the twisting feelings deep in their guts.
Keep working on writing, it is food for the soul. Good luck.
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