Thanks for sharing your interesting story with us.I thought it was an interesting read and has all the elements of a good tale - you set the scene, introduce your characters to your audience and build your story which has a feel good ending. Well done. If I had any suggestions, it would be to use action or dialogue to 'show' not 'tell'. Conversation might help reveal more of the person's character as you lead the reader through to the conclusion.
Keep up the great work, you have a good talent developing.
WOW, Bob, great piece on a sad and thought provoking subject. A difficult concept, well handled and emotionally charged. The only small suggestion I have is that you check the spelling of 'Tomorrow'. I only say this because I have so much trouble myself with spelling.
The piece is compact and I think the subject would even lend its self to a short story or perhaps a novel. It's honest as it is genuine. Keep up the good work.
Thank you for sharing.
Cheers
Red
Dear Welsh Chick, The first thing I noticed with your poem is that you write from strength. A strength that continued through the piece showing me, the reader, that you are better than those that would attempt to judge you after such a traumatic event.
I felt the raw emotion and I can tell it's written from the heart. The question 'But what have I lost?' is powerful and made me think. I believe the poem can translate into other situations for a reader and therefore could easily relate to it.
All I can say is 'well done'! I personally enjoyed your this poem. Keep on writing.
Cheers
Red
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