I liked your story very much. The humor of the Doctor and Melvin was good. Sounded a little odd when all of them said the narrator to stay with Melvin all the time to keep his scalp in a fixed position. There were many at that time who could have done that. But okay, the story was good.
Your writing is very great and interesting, that I felt I was in that scene myself. Mainly, the ending was good when God taught a lesson to the one who rejected his prayers. It is true that we should not question God's presence or creations. Just believe in Truth.
All the best for your next writing.
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