I enjoyed reading this chapter of the story. The main character was introduced well, and the personality of the character/program was realistic.
However, I feel the need to call to your attention the fact that the story and the age rating you gave it do not match. The story is rated 'E', but the curses used within suggest otherwise. I would not want a, say, 9-year-old to be reading such terms, which the rating system clearly is designed to avoid.
Other than that and some grammatical errors and certain misspellings, the story had a good plot and good characters. Thumbs up!
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