The dialogue got confusing at times, especially in the beginning. The setting is hard to grasp at first, and that just might be you style of dialogue confusing me. It seems like a very interesting concept though. I'm interested to hear and read more, but I can't really give any suggestions because i'm still foggy on what the concept really is. Keep writing, i'm very curious.
Printed from https://writing.com/main/profile/reviews/mrjingles
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.11 seconds at 3:01pm on Nov 16, 2024 via server WEBX2.