So nice - the last paragraph really shows put together what the poem has been painting stroke by stroke - last paragraph is the right frame to really show the best of what picture your poem is painting
Time to go I guess...One can only take so many harsh decembers. This is a very impactful poem - taking me into the mind of a weary tired elf. Eternal life can be eternal hell I guess. RIP tired elf
The last hint to read it in Morgan Freeman's voice is what really made the story great. Morgan Freeman just has a way of bringing a feeling a personal importance to most any story being told.
Interesting. I would like to hear more about her and the dumbots - what they are feeling in a little more detail - It got me into it to want to keep reading. I'm giving it 5 stars
That is so funny and just raw really took me into the mind of someone else. It was interesting. Keep up the writing, cause you have a lot to offer. I like it.
Really good - I liked how the story wasn't predictable. It is a character reacting to a strange situation in a natural way. I feel like she is a real person.
Hope for tough times. Thank you. This finds hope for me in a situation for there seems none. I feel you are a friend though we have never met...something about your poetry befriends me.
I'm rating 5 and I'd like to hear more of politics from you. I like this and think there is nothing wrong with seeing how bad politics can be. Good but so much negative about politicians - they mess up and things are bad now but they are people. Politicians can't be all bad...let us know where there is hope...or quit putting politicians down...cause politicians won't listen if people don't offer hope. I wouldn't write this just at your pessimistic poem, cause it is true and there is nothing wrong with looking at what is wrong...I just think with your good ideas you could find hope for people who feel stuck in politics.
So she filled it with air cause that unbalances the body to kill without suffering? Interesting - I didn't think there was another way out. It probably would be surprising how many times there is another way out of any situation that really seems to have no way out! Very realistic how your characters act - that makes for good reading.
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