Hello, just read your story and wanted to give a quick review. I thought the story was well written and unique. I liked the concept, kind of like the grim reaper if he was a guitarist. While reading, I wondered why you didn't name the musician but I think that made the ending more effective. I didn't see any major punctuation or grammar errors. Overall, I thought your writing was very descriptive and I enjoyed the story. Good work.
Hi, just read your story and wanted to give a quick review. As a man, I found it interesting to read a woman's perspective of admiring a stranger. Your story was insightful and I wondered where you were going with it. I found the ending a little anti-climactic. If I could make a suggestion it would be to perhaps expand the ending a little and go more into how the character felt about the contrast between her checking out someone versus her being checked out by someone, and her recognition of the difference. Overall, I like the way this was written and the detail included (the bangs over the eyes part, for example). Good job, hope to read more of your work.
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