It's a lovely poem. But I'm not sure why you used poppies and not any other flower. Is there a special significance to this? The rythmic description of the war from the past and until now is a nice touch. It has emotion without being overly dramatic. I also liked that near the end you inserted a "hopeful" verse but still finished with death, because really, that's where all wars end.
"The same stars are out there
Wherever you are"- I love this line!
This is so nice! you wrote this for your brother and sister-in-law? Well, they must be very special and I'm sure they appreciated this very much. When you read it a couple of times, and if you don't know that it's written for some people who are (fighting?) in Iraq, one can imagine it to be a love song in earnest.
I really liked it! This is very romantic, in my opinion. Autumn (where there is autumn, because here, we don't) is always a beautiful season. I loved that you compared love and commitment/marriage to the feel of autumn. I can just imagine, two people who have been together for such a long time, now in the twilight of their life and still deeply in love. It is simply beautiful. Thank you for sharing this.
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