I really enjoyed this. Once I started reading I couldn't stop. Also, I agree with many philosophies that you proposed. You seem to have a good idea about human nature. Every day, we fight the natural man, and we often get caught up in what others and the world expects of us. I also, loved your word choice. For example, "We should define our titles; our titles should not define us." Was very poetic and beautiful. It made me stop and think. Now, if you are concerned about grammar/punctuation, I'd like to make a suggestion. First of all, very good use of the semicolon! The independent clauses were separated well. However, the first sentence was a run-on sentence. Perhaps, instead, you could say, "This is sometimes a good thing because we often help others by doing what's best for ourselves. However, this can also be a bad thing because greed can overwhelm us." Keep writing!
Yeah! I love it bro. When you read this to me, I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. It totally reminds me of my friend circle. This is super creative and awesome!
I really liked that. I got captivated by the words and I couldn't stop reading. I'ts very complex for my mind so I'm going to have to read it again ha. But great job keep goingMy review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.12 seconds at 9:08pm on Nov 21, 2024 via server WEBX2.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
My review has been submitted for consideration in "