I really liked your composition. It was so poignant and heart-touching. But, with all due respect, I feel as if she got over the grief too soon. Like all of a sudden she realized she didn't need him anymore. But still it was good. It's obvious you're a great writer!
It's awesome, really!
I LOVED it! You're really good at expressing emotions.
There's just one tiny error, I think... in the 2nd last para, shouldn't it have been "If there was any way.." instead of "If there were any way..." ?
Anyways, Keep up the good work!
I really liked it! You have bright future ahead as a writer, I can assure you that!
The imagery is so good here. And I really like the concept of the story. Realizing the real me, is everyone's motive, but only few can achieve that!
Keep up the good work!
I really liked it! It has a nice flow to it. You have really expressed the feeling of speaking, when not supposed to, in a nice and interesting way!
Keep up the good work,
Hm... its good, a little improvement is required though. In some places the meaning of what you're trying to say is not quite clear. Example-:
"it is my feeling less"
You will also have to work on expressing your emotions through your poem.
And I noticed, in the 2nd line you wrote "in night".. shouldn't it be "at night"?
But other than that, I its nicely done!
Keep up the good work,
I liked your article! It was interesting with parts of humor. And, you are absolutely right in saying that "nerds make the world keep spinning" ! I definitely agree with that!
Keep up the good work,
Jennifer
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