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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Squishy:

You write with an engaging style. The opening scene was credible in time and place, making it easy to visualize and suspend disbelief to be drawn in. The writing is concise with depth and texture.

I would suggest defining Skylie's problem/conflict and what is at stake sooner or at least allude to it.

Good read so far!

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Color Me . . .

It's rather fitting that the google ads to your poem are:

'Discount Beauty - L'Oréal Official Site. Deals & Free Samples on Health & Beauty Products'

and

'Step-by-Step Tips from Cosmeticians Plus New Beauty Products & Offers www.shoppersdrugmart.ca'

This gives me an idea to create a writing challenge to mocks the ads that accompany it. Ha! Sorry I digress.

Regarding your 'L'Oréal Haiku'

The first thing that comes to mind is to juxtapose your verses to prose addressing the cost of inner beauty.

Ciao

Molinara
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