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Review of My Prayer  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
If you could visit my port and read this item: "Angelia -- IV -- Teen sex and Drug UseOpen in new Window., you would know that this prayer touched me so much. I did make grievous mistakes--the worst kind for a teenager, I think--but now I am reformed, and rediscovered Christ's blessings. I will copy this prayer (I hope you don't mind) for my journal to read every now and then, especially when the past comes back again to haunt me.

Thank you for sharing this emotional prayer.,

Bless you.

RMK
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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Out of all the stories I've read here, this is the one the tugs at my heart the most. My beloved grandma from my dad's side is starting to show signs of dementia. She lives in New York -- very far from me. I only see her once or twice a year, and each time, she's becoming less affectionate and attentive, as if she's having a hard time remembering me. My dad and his siblings are afraid to talk about it, or maybe just to the grandchildren. If that's the case, I think they should give teenagers the respect and tell us what is going on and what is to expect. Having read your two stories so far has made me come more aware of this disease. We are visiting my grands this summer, and I am inspired by your stories to approach the adults to tell us if grandma is getting the Alzheimer's.,

Thank you for sharing this very eye-opening story.

Write on.

RMK
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Review of Lover's Call  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Erlyn,

I fell in love (although my parents call it "teen infatuation") late last summer with a fellow student who saved me from an depressive state, and I owe my future to him. We are so much in love, and I know exactly how it is to feel the emotions you described in this beautiful poem. So romantic! Thank you for sharing.

Write on.

RMK

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear alz heimer,

This is a most astonishing story, and extremely well-written, too. I've never heard of a woman in her thirties getting an Alzheimer's disease. How dreadful! And to think she had the most brilliant mind, incredible beauty and personality is twice as heart wrenching to me. She had the world in her hand, and all so suddenly it was snatched away from her in a most cruel way. You are so wonderful to write about your Aunt Sarah's battle with this disease. I hope to read more.

Write on.

RMK
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Review of Literary Ambrosia  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey there. I am still in your port, now reading this poem. It's funny that I would be doing this when I am not a fan of poetry. I cringe at the thought of having to write one. I like your writing style. It's so easy to read and understand. In this particular poem, you talk about, and use, all five senses effectively. Yet, even with such inspired writing, you say your work fails to inspire the editor to accept your work. What's a person got to do? This is entertaining, and caught me off guard with its ending. Funny. I love these lines:

Inspiration swells in my chest.
I see, feel, smell, taste and hear.
So I rush to translate the mood
in carefully selected words on page


Thanks for sharing.

Write on.

Rocky Mountain Kid

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Jeepers! You've certainly packed in a lot of sensual tones in this very short poem about writing. Very well done. I never thought I would one day be reading a poem about writing with so much sensuality wrapped in two meaningful stanzas. I write about family and my teen troubles, so my stories are all devoid of any sensuality.
I love this part:
A collage of verbs,
of scintillating adjectives,
etched onto the canvas.


Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem.

Write on.

Rocky Mountain Kid
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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This made me smile because I just had my AP test yesterday in world history, and I'm sure I barely passed, if at all. History is not my strong suit; in fact, I stink at it. I always have to work twice as hard compared to all my other subjects, particularly, Math. Reading this made me try to remember who's who, and what's what, and where's where. *Laugh*. But this is a much more enjoyable read than what we're compelled to read in school. If only History were this easy to read, I wouldn't struggle to get a C on it. This is great poetry writing. I wish I had your talent to weave words together to form a short but meaningful line.

Thank you for sharing this.

Write on.

Rocky Mountain Kid

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Review of Bruised  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
"Bruises are discolourations of the skin,
Bruises physical and bruises within.
Bruises resulting from a body knock,
Bruises inside from an emotional shock."

I love this poem. You did a wonderful job as usual. I have experienced all the above in my young life. The most hurting of all were the internal bruises--the mental and emotional. I'm finally recovering from most of these bruises, and once again, life no longer seems to be maeningless anymore.

Thank you for sharing your gift that makes us think.

Write on.

Kid.


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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Having experienced depression in my teen years (I'm recovering now), I can identify with the narrator of this poem. There were many times when I felt like clawing through a wall and die at the height of my depression. You did a wonderful and excellent job with your vivid descriptions.

Wrte on.

Kid
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Review of Inside My Head  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am constantly hearing songs in my head; sometimes it's because of my teenage love and romance; sometimes because I loved the song I just heard on the radio; and sometimes because I want to tune out the nagging of an elderly in the household.

I do not know who Marlene Cummins is, but she seemed like an exceptionally wonderful and musical Australian woman. To be remembered like this by someone like you has got to be one of the best things one could receive posthumously.

Wonderful job.

Kid
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Review of Taboo  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Oct. 26, 2007

Hi Marty Livingston,

I wondered what the "Taboo" title was all about. Now I understand. It bothered me in the beginning because Tim was twelve, and Dina was six, when the fascination (and obsession?) started. They’re first cousins. I remember what my half-brother once said when my Mom started dating her cousin after Mom divorced my Dad. My brother said that what Mom was doing was illegal in 48 States. I don’t know if that’s true or not. I was barely twelve then. Mom is married with my uncle now.

I have a few technical suggestions; they're inside the [].

She didn’t have a thought about anyone watching[,] and just danced and skipped—

Tim and Dina both went back to there[their] own places—

They didn’t spend much time together[,] and then many years later--

Good job.

Write on.

RMK
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Review of Prince  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
oCTOBER 26, 2007

Dear Mrs. P.

I’m so happy to see this, which sheds some light on the mystery behind the poem "Prince." You said that your book should have enough to appeal to both the action/adventure reader, as well as the cerebral/abstract reader. I’m not sure if I belong IN either group, but I want to tell you one thing: I have enjoyed reading your work so much, even though you recommend it for the 18+ crowd only. I think I have enough maturity in me, and my two good friends here sitting next to me (you know who they are – Savannah and Nicole – your fans) to appreciate your stories without any negative effect on us.

I think you’re getting a little too advanced for our mini-literary brains to fully understand Dr. William R. Flagg ’s scrutiny of the hidden messages behind the poem "Prince." OK, I understand the meaning of "Empress" now, but the whole thing still baffles me. And my friends here are not helping at all. Nicole thinks she’s figured it out, but she says this while giggling, so why should I believe her?

You know, I hate to admit this, but I think I am getting lost. Your novel seemed simple enough to understand and follow, from "I’ll Always Be Your Friend; through Yellow Bandana." But now, I think it’s getting too complicated, and it hurts my brain thinking about it. Maybe when it’s all done, and we can read it in one continuous read, I’d be able to follow and understand everything. Savannah and Nicole are nodding their heads in agreement.

Also, you mention that your novel intersects sometimes with the Jack Goldman series. I don’t remember having read about him in the past. Savannah just researched (she has her laptop with her) if there could be a real Dr. Jack Goldman. She found a Dr. Jack Goldman, an American scientist, the visionary behind Xerox. We don’t think he’s your man here. Then Nicole saw the reference to "Evil Wind" by Mr. P. So now, we know. But I think this is multiplying our confusion. But this is probably good for us. After all, we need to explore our analytical minds. Heh-heh.

Well, that’s all for now, Mrs. P. Till next time.

As always, great job. Always virtually perfect. No visible technical mistakes, whatsoever.

Write on.

RMK
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Review of Tin Heart  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
October 25, 2007

Hi Noe,

This is my review of "Tin Heart" (item:1320556)

Wow, I've never read any of your work before, and am I pleased that I have now.

This is so wonderfully written. Such a romantic love story between a tin soldier and a doll. This is so unique, and I love it. It's almost like reading a Shakespearean tragedy. I was rooting for the tin soldier to make it all the way up the stairs. Oh, so close, and yet so far.

Great job. Well-deserving of the awardicon. Write on.

RMK
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Review of Chapter 1  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Dear Sarai,

First of all, my deepest sympathy for the death of your brother, then your brother's friend, and now, your friend Steven Rodriguez. You have been surrounded with so much pain, yet, you found the time to share your compassion and emotional support to me in my time of need. Thank you again for that.

I can't believe that your parents left you, especially during this terrible time. This was edited in April; have your parents come back yet? How are you living? I know you go to school, but who buys your food, etc?

I think this first chapter to our novel needs more exposition that you've provided. It also could use some restructuring and more editing for grammar, spelling and syntax. I'm going to wait till after your next edit to point out the errors.

More comments:

I don't understand several things, i.e.:

1. Did your parents leave you at your home alone? Are you at home right now?

2. How did your brother die?

3. How did Cyrus die? You mentioned that he once overdosed with ice; is that what killed him?

When you first mentioned Angel and Joker as your two best friends, I thought they were your pets.

I do not understand this sentence the way it's phrased. "The day is coming they died and I have been in my room for two days." Did Angel and Joker die, too? Or were you referring to your brother and his friend?

This is sad, and I hope you're doing much better.

Hugs,

Rocky Mountain Kid

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Review of This is who I am  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Sarai,

As promised, I am now in your port to read your stuff. I thought it would be best that I start getting to know you, so I clicked on this one. It doesn't really a whole lot about yourself, but it has given me a better understanding about who you are.

You said: "I don't take rejection very easily." Ooo, I hope that doest translate into not taking unfavorable reviews well. I used to take it personally when a teacher would grade my work unfavorably. WDC has changed that attitude. It helps that there are so many kind members who are willing to help young aspiring writers like us improve our craft.

I want to take this opportunity, first of all, to thank you again for following up on my situation. I have finally posted the following item that will give you the story of how life has been for me since my fall from grace. I would appreciate it if you would clik on the following link for the story:
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Thank you, Sarai. Now I start reading your novel.

Write on.

Rocky Mountain Kid

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Raskia,

As promised, I am dropping by your port to say Hi and check out your library of stuff. I just read Kiyasama's note to the Angel Army about the death of your close friend who was killed over $200. This is a tragic ending for a very young man who left a young family. So sad. My deepest sympathy to you and to his family.

I need to go back to my class. I will start reading your items soon.

Thanks for your friendship.

RMK

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is terrific! I'm a newbie in every sense of the writing word. I just discovered recently that I like to write, and this article will help me improve, for sure, especially with respect to what they call "show don't tell." I have a novel in progress called "Angelia." quite ambitious for someone who just started to write, and who just turned sixteen, huh?

Thanks for sharing this how-to article.

Write on.

RMK

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Review of Nature Never Told  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good morning Mr. O'Fallon,

A REVIEW OF: "NATURE NEVER TOLD"

I didn't know what I was expecting to read when I clicked on this item. Whoa, at 5:30 a.m. this is a heart-wrenching read. I've never read anything as sad as this. I felt the grief in your words. I can't imagine how it must be like to lose a child before you could even dress her and put a ribbon on her hair.

"I'd hoped to read you fairy tales. I'd planned to teach you rhyme;
But now your tales are fairer and your verse eclipses mine;"


This is an unforgettable poem. Thank you for sharing it. Hope we meet her someday, and she can show us Heaven's ways.

RMK

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Review of Nature Never Told  Open in new Window.
Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Mr. O'Fallon,

I didn't know what I was expecting to read about when I clicked on this item. Whoa, at 5:30 a.m. this is a heart-wrenching read. I've never read anything as sad as this. I felt the grief in your words. I can't imagine how it must be like to lose a child before you could even dress her and put a ribbon on her hair.

"I'd hoped to read you fairy tales. I'd planned to teach you rhyme;
But now your tales are fairer and your verse eclipses mine;"


This is an unforgettable poem. Thank you for sharing it. Hope we meet her someday, and she can show us Heaven's ways.

RMK

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear writeartista,

This is just soooo generous of you to design these original sigs and donate them to the WDC Angel Army for their sig auctions. These are all gorgeous.

I love this one, and I would like to have it customized with my handle: "RockyMountainKid" please, pretty please. Let me know how many GPs I need to give and to whom.

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Lisa,

Whenever I click on an item of your creation, I always expect nothing short of extraordinary. Your word choices are always precise and meaningful. Your messages are always clear. Not this time for me, I'm sorry. My teenage mind is still, I'm afraid, untrained to this kind of symbolic and philosophical writing. It's beautiful to read, but it hurts my brain trying to decipher your meaning.

In my quest for knowledge, I would appreciate it if someone would tell me what these lines mean:

"A malediction spread its magic black"

"Those wise have taught on being lost
and say one way to find the way
is seek the start."

"Illusion's Lock"

Thank you.

RMK

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Carol, A REVIEW FROM RMK About your A MADISON COUNTY EVENT ID #1153533

Some of my best friends are people I haven't met in person--literary women who've been supportive of me. That's why when writeartista emailed me and others recommending your piece on extraordinary friendship between two women, I just had to read it as soon as possible.

I love reading about friendship, especially one like this: very tight, fun, literary and entertaining. I just turned 16, and I have a lot of friends, but there’s only very special one that can so far compare to your friendship with Connie. I hope mine will last as long as yours did. I was saddened when I read the part about her being gone already. She must have passed on very young.

I loved the movie, which is the subject of Connie’s practical joke on you. I have never read the book, but I’ve heard that it was not well written. You seem to share the same opinion on this. Maybe I’ll read it someday after I’ve acquired some more experience in writing to see what literary people mean.

Your story is very well written, in my opinion. There are some lengthy sentences that broke the flow for me, and I do not understand why you capitalize NATIONAL GEOGRAPHIC. Does it have to be?

That’s all for my review and comments. I hope to read more from your port soon because I like the way you write.

Write on.

RMK

When you have the time, I would appreciate your R&R on my novel:

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dear Writeartista,

You are a gifted writer and a gifter artist. You also have a big heart. Thank you for coming to my emotional rescue during the tough times I never thought I would experience at fifteen years of age.

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These are all beautiful art masterpieces you've displayed here. But I am partial to this one above that you created just for me and my novel, now entitled "ANGELIA."
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This is about my Dad's girlfriend. Angelia--the most perfect woman I've ever known.
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Again, from the bottom of my heart, thank you.

RMK

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Dear Kiyasama and the WDC Angel Army:

I just want to take a few minutes off my lunch break to express my gratitude and endless appreciation to you and the WDC Angel Army for coming to my aid when I needed it. I will never forget all the emotional support, and all the words of wisdom, you've given me during this very difficult time in my life.

I have found my Guardian Angelsin you. Who knew that this would happen on the Internet--with the people I've never met, and whom I only know electronically through words.

My special acknowledgement to the anonymous Angels who donated the 20,000 GPs this morning to me; and to the anonymous Angel who donated the beautiful and most appropriate sig below, which Kiyasama designed.

Again, thank you, my Guardian Angels.

Here's the sig. I hope I downloaded it right.

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Review by RockyMountainKid Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
September 15, 2007

Dear Kiya and the Angel Army.
(And any caring WDC member
Who is interested in hearing this
Confession of a troubled and distraught teenager)

Subject: In search of my guardian angels.

I thought I would raid your port. Amazingly, I opened this folder, and the first thing I read was this quote by Eleanor Roosevelt:

You gain strength, courage and confidence by every experience in which you really stop to look fear in the face. You are able to say to yourself, "I lived through this horror, I can take the next thing that comes along."...You must do the thing you think you cannot do.

If the length of this note does not discourage you from reading it, you will see how perfect the above words of wisdom are in my particular present situation.

I'm in exile, or a house arrest, which at this time is my personal metaphor for being grounded indefinitely for the sins I've committed--sins involving sex and drugs of the worst kind. I'm lucky I'm still alive. I deserve the punishment; I only hope that something good will come out of this. I also hope that this won't risk my membership in the National Honor Society, and that it won't affect my straight A grades in school.

It was the worst summer of my life. And the explosive discovery of my crime had to happen on my birthday. My Sweet Sixteen event that I so looked forward to because of . . . yes, the car, turned into an absolute nightmare. I was six hours late for my own birthday party because I was out celebrating with older kids doing--you know what. I was tripping all over the place when I got home. The sunglasses at night and the swaying gave it all away as soon as I entered the house. Horrified, my mother started crying and yelling at me. I will spare you the details.

I did not get the birthday car, but that’s not the worst consequence of my sins. Yesterday, my mother told me that she doesn’t know if she could trust me ever again. Worse, she said sometimes she hates me for what I’ve done. She constantly dwells on the reasons why I did what I did. She would not believe that I had no reason. They just happened, and she should not blame and condemn other kids because no one forced me to do the things I did. They also didn’t know that I was still fifteen when it all started. I lied about my age, which was the first time I ever lied about anything in my life. I know I did say in my WDC bio blog that I was already sixteen when I registered. It was because Yahoo required parental consent (and credit card information) for kids my age.

My father is much more forgiving, and he never condemned me for what I did. He only wants to make sure that I will be all right, and that I’ve learned a very important lesson from this experience. He thinks about the present and the future; what had happened is spilled milk. I am not hurt, and all the medical tests proved negative. That’s all he needed to hear. My parents are divorced. Mom has remarried, and somehow, she doesn’t seem to trust me to be around my stepfather anymore when she’s not home. This is so ridiculous. She keeps rubbing salt on my wound. I love her, but I wish I could be with my Dad everyday now.

Yes, I'm not allowed to go anywhere unless a family member is with me, so this weekend, my best friend and company are WDC and your Angel Army. Most of my friends are now prevented by their parents to hang around me in school. I feel as if I have contracted a horrible disease and I am shunned for it. So far, I've gotten a lot of kind support from "my friends" in WDC. If only I could feel the true warmth of their comforting hugs.

I've spent most of the day today reading and writing. WDC and the Angel Army are the best things in my life right now outside of school. I'm not allowed to be on the Internet unless it's for homework. I can no longer access my account on www.myspace.com. However, WDC is acceptable because I use a pseudonym. My parents promised that they will not try to spy on what I write on WDC. It was okay for them not to get my password; they give me that much privacy and respect. I would die if they find out that I am writing a novel about Angelica (the real name is changed for her privacy). She is my Dad's girlfriend, my friend, my confidant, and my idol. Unfortunately, we haven't heard from her for months. I miss her now, more than ever.

I am getting too emotional now, so it’s time to cut this “short” and try to compose myself. I plan on writing an essay about all this, and maybe even incorporate it in my novel somehow.

Please share this epistle to the Angel Army. I will be grateful for any advice and kind words of encouragement and inspiration you can give me. See . . . you are not only a writing friend, but also a potential personal crisis friend.

Rocky Mountain Kid
A PROUD MEMBER OF THE
WDC ANGEL ARMY




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