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#3349849

Review of A Letter to my Brother

Review by mistygal01

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

This is beautiful. I can imagine tears streaming down someone's face as they write this. It's kind of sad but in a happy and wistful way. It tells me as a reader everything I need to know and nothing that I don't. The little things like 'you used to try and teach me words' show that this character has such a background and that maybe something went wrong somewhere in it. It's almost tragic, but without all the baggage of what happened before explained in detail to weigh it down. Well done.

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#3349846

Review of Twilight/New Moon Fanfiction Ch. 1

Review by mistygal01

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

This is really good, I could almost believe that it could be something that Stephanie might actually write. I have trouble believing that it is in character for Edward to 'give in' that easily, but this is fanfiction after all. But, yes it is really well written and you have captured both Bella and Charlie perfectly. You write very well =)

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#3349707

Review of A Teen's Prayer

Review by mistygal01

Rated: E

| (5.0)

I honestly can't find anything in this that can be improved. You have captured the feeling of being a teenager completely, especially one like me who grew up believing in God but seemed to 'grow out' of it, not by choice, but by the circumstances life threw at you. I love the contrasts you make between the then and now, the now and future and the then and the future. I especially liek the bit that says ' i want to be older, i want to be younger'.
The most I can say for this is that I 100%, totally, unquestionably AGREE!!!

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#3349696

Review of Prologue

Review by mistygal01

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

This is great. I love the intrigue you have put into it from the very first line. You write very well and say things without using too many cliches which i highly praise. There are a few places where you should have comma's, full stops, dashes or other grammatical things and dont, or have the wrong one, but that's nothing that some proofreading won't fix. Keep it up, I'm intrigued to read more!

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#3349328

Review of Essence Of Character

Review by mistygal01

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

This is a great survey that addresses a few things I've often considered myself. Characters can make or break a story and it is important to get them right to get the reader to like the story and the characters. the questions you have asked are well thought, to the point and helpful. Improvements could probably be questions like what gender in a character do you relate more to or what age group of character. things like that.