I adored this story! The plot was fantastic and it was well written. You gave away just enough information at the right times to keep me hooked until the end. There were a couple of moments where I had to pause to figure out what was happening (when the characters were talking in the last third), because there was a lot of information given very quickly.
This was a fantastic piece of writing. I vividly had images and moods in my mind of your sort of "mixed blessing." How odd that out of somebody else's mistake, which put you in a horrible place, you were able to find something in yourself.
Writing by hand verses on a computer: yes, computer is faster, but in the end, the computer stuff got lost and the handwritten was safe. Also, I feel that handwritten has more meaning, because I have to put more effort into what I write, so I have to give it more thought.
I had a very vivid image in my mind only a couple of sentences into the story. The combination of simplicity and powerful images was stunning. I didn't need to know anything about the person who had found the body for the story to be good. Also, the fact that you use the words "platonic relationship" was great.
If you wanted to write a whole novel around this you could, but it's great just the way it is. I can't find anything worthy to suggest you edit (rare for me). There were a couple of long sentences you could split in two.
I liked it a lot!
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