Its a poem vibrant with emotion, I can feel your emotions going through it..and also the theme u've chosen is very intesrting becoz all girls have this one time in their lives where they feel bitter becoz of a cold act by a boy..I liked it, although I'd like to suggest a few improvemnts in the poem,
when curtain falls,
Then do we die?
The second line in this verse, it doesnt really make proper sense, u switched over to a question abruptly..
MY Favourite LINES-You took the treasure,
Now take the blame,
Feel that rain fall on your face,
Scream and cry with no embrace
ALL IN ALL, a nicely done piece of work.And do keep writing such excellent pieces.
Wow..that was really very stirring...child abuse and relationships..they hurt a whole lot..I especially liked the way you portrayed the girl as an angel..Im vrery touched...Do keep writing ....you are wonderful at this...
Its unbelievable how well you've written that...Im so touched..I mean, you've expressed the simple pure innocent feeling of childhood luv so well, I can seriously cry...Everythings so different once you grow up...only physical gestures matter..I think that was refreshing and beutiful...Plz do keep writing..BTW, plz do rate my poem You are Not Alone on the teen genre...Thx..Luv.
This poem is sooo rad!!!Its totally upbeat and ends up making you feel funny and happy...You know, wat Imean...very cool...Plzzz do keep writing such awesum poems...
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