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Review of The Basement  
Review by mirja
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I love it! So honest and full of emotion, I can see what you saw and feel what you felt. Keep at it!

As a non-native speaker myself, I understand the difficulties the English language can sometimes give us, but yours is really good. The only obvious grammatical error I saw was in the first paragraph "abused of" - you don't need a preposition with "abuse". Otherwise I think your English flows really well and is wonderful to read.

mirja
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Review of The Review Mixer  
Review by mirja
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful encouragement to members - please accept my donation and thank you for doing this.

Mirja
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Review of A Thousand Pieces  
Review by mirja
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I like this poem. Having gone through a divorce not too long ago, it speaks to me and evokes feelings in the pit of my stomach. I like the words you chose,they are powerful and clever at the same time - true marks of good poetry!

One suggestion I have is to perhaps revisit:
My heart is Locked
From your last words.
Where is the key?

It doesn't seem as powerful as the rest of the poem - a bit too 'conventional' - maybe look at an image of something being locked and cannot be opened, or heart wrapped inside something that hurts and cannot be unwrapped etc (I hope this makes sense).

This is a good poem, and I hope you keep writing and sharing your obvious talent with the with the world!

Mirja
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