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Review of My Insanity  Open in new Window.
Review by Mike Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Pretty good work. I see one line that troubles me and that is about asking for help: I asking my family for help before I feeling like drowning. I think this would be a bit better said plainly: I asked my family for help; before,a feeling of drowning. and on the line of stopping running I think perhaps ---says, "It's time too, to stop running--" I get goofed up on the use of To and Too all the time and have to check you may want to as well. Quote marks are ok in poetry too, you know. I use them if I am slamming down a statment.
One more on forgetting---ways; But, forget not the lose of ease the way you have stated that one means you should and have to forget and I know you are saying you can't.
Have a fine day and write on; do it with a smile!
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Review of So! No! Go!  Open in new Window.
Review by Mike Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked it the form is fun and it has a nice ryhme. The line set as it is adds an interesting maze complex to ones thinking that sayes, "Please complete!" I think this adds to the fullness of this work. It is simple, clean, cute and stands calling to all that it is complex. The whole affect seems to give at least me a feeling of lightfulness in being yet satisfaction that I have completed it. Good Job!
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