"Sadness may impart this dwelling of loneliness or grief
Much as witnessing its bare tree with a single leaf.
An observer could imagine infinite possibilities
Of tales to be told about any of these."
this:
A temperate glow behind a bolted portal,
A cavernous room utters bizarre and dismal.
Offending smells hiss and gurgle; a conjurer must begin,
As magick ..."
and this:
"On this dark, cold, and dreary late Autumn night,
A weary traveler makes his way by the sliver of moonlight.
A yellow glow, ... "
... in my opinion, could stand as three independent poems, if you like. I like all of it. I'm not the best person to rate a review on, though. My grammar and punctuation are also finding their own troubles but, I really think the second verse of the second version should be its own poem. I like them. AND ... No need to reward with GPs, luv. You reviewed mine so I reviewed yours. I'll send them back so you can give to a more useful review.
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