Well written and informed article. I find no typos, misspellings, etc. The part of the equation you left out, (maybe on purpose?) is parents. or at least you only name them indirectly for abusive situations. Often, it is easy to not become involved in your own child's education because it is the school and teachers "job" to teach. This is wrong and a dangerous way of thinking. I like you sticking in the popo and others on your list. Nice fact about Finland...etc,. I bet some people would not believe it, America the great and all, but, unfortunately, I have no doubt you are right.
Great poem. It keeps you reading and waiting to find out what happened. I think I would have done the same as the father in the poem, but I guess I will never know. Again, great poem, it will cause many to well up. It reads nicely but I must say the fourth paragraph tripped up both me and my wife. It is a nice engaging story.
I really like how descriptive you are. I notice one area it could be made to read a little smoother. I see a few spots where you repeat words. For example, you use the word heal 3 times within 13 words. I think with more work your piece will be great.
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