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for entry "Muffy - Tongue Twister 2 - Happy Hippo"

Review by Maryann

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

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Sonali, thanks for visiting "Muffy's Mischievous Challenges" again. You can participate in tasks on this forum multiple times. It's all in fun after all!

Oh my gosh! I loved the creativity that you thought up for the hippo tongue twister! Who would have imagined you could make that big story out of, A happy hippo hopped and hiccupped! I loved how you tied it into the tortoise and the hare! It was very cute, and captivating, too!

I liked that you set the scene of a race, and expressed the anticipation of the hippo contestant and his family. The poor guy didn't prepare well for the race, did he! He ended up hopping with hiccups! LOL So much fun!

One very tiny typo toward the end - 'here' should be 'hear'.

Thanks again for telling this fun story.

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for entry "Choconut's Conjuring Trick"

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Rated: 18+

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Hi Sonali! I loved this fun story! I bet the snail-mail people might love it as much as I did!

You created a great idea for this story. I thought it was a perfect way to use the prompt.

I love everything, Harry Potter, (and I know you do) so I can truly appreciate where this story went. I liked that you presented a dilemma. In this case, the snails went on strike, so the snail mail couldn't go out. I had fun reading about a couple of our WDC friends here, too.

What a great idea to turn the snails into owls. It was a wonderful conjuring trick for sure! Not only would the mail go out, but it would be quicker than if they had stayed snails.

By the way, I loved the words the caster used with her wand! Fun!

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Review of Microscopic Stories

for entry "Choconut's Conjuring Trick"

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Rated: 18+

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Nice work, Beholden! I really loved this story!

Wow, you are so creative! You took pieces of several other prompts and used them to create an idea for this one! You 'conjured' up the perfect story!

I liked how you set the scene, with party activities. You named some of the people there and built up the entertainment excitement. The ending was perfect, as I enjoyed the 'magic trick'! Well done.

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#4753623

Review of Microscopic Stories

for entry "Lornda's Leaf"

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

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Hi Beholden! Thanks for your participation at "Muffy's Mischievous Challenges" .

I loved your humorous story! I had no idea how this story was going, and then you popped in that fun ending! Lornda will love your comedic approach as much as I did!

You did a great job with the setting in this little story. I could imagine all the falling leaves on an autumn day. It was fun to read that the character was searching diligently for just the right leaf. It's a good thing the narrator was thinking outside the box, and found one that wasn't in the pile!

Nicely done, and thanks for writing it. Remember that you can write as many of these as you wish. There is no limit. You're great at this!

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#4753595

Review of The P Shop

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Rated: E

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Hi Tracker, and thanks for participating in the "Muffy's Mischievous Challenges"

. Your story was a great way to honor Phyllis, PWheeler!

I loved the pretty, 'flowery' P in your brief introduction image, and I liked the way you brought us back to that with the mention of how it was on the shop itself.

P for Phyllis, P for Potion, P for Pwheeler - it could mean it all.

Your story had a creative plot and ending. I liked that you also introduced another character, Mariah, who had been walking up the street, looking around, and felt the flowery P was intriguing.

What a great ending! Phyllis' potion brought a feeling of love, joy and peace. Nicely done!

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for entry "Maryann's Monkey"

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Rated: 18+

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Hi Sonali, and, Oh My Gosh!, what a fun story!! Everything about it screamed, fun! First of all, I loved the font. It reminded me of the font in the fun activity which this is from.

I didn't expect the paragraphs to have a fun letter theme. It reminded me of Alliteration poetry a bit. I felt that it was zany, and crazy, and made a lot of sense along with the zany, crazy monkey antics.

You started with a bang, as I read all about the mischievous monkey causing disruption at the Marvel Mango Milkshake Makers shop.

I almost thought the story would be all letter, M, words, but then you moved on to the, C, words! My favorite might have been the, J, words, with Jolly Jim jogging up.

Great way to end the fun story with the line, 'And they all lived happily ever after. Wow, you did that all in a small space! Nicely done.

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#4753271

for entry "Lornda's Leaf"

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Rated: 18+

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Hi Sonali! Thanks for your participation in the challenge at "Muffy's Mischievous Challenges" . You wrote a very unique and sweet story with this prompt!

I always dreamed of going to the Galapagos Islands. Maybe that can go on my bucket list! LOL With the mention of it right in your first sentence, the scene was set for a sunny, lovely, exotic story.

Awe so cute! I would never have thought to make the main character a turtle! You are a very creative writer, indeed!

Your introduction of the giant turtle was done well. I could imagine from your descriptions, this giant turtle enjoying life, strolling around the island, and eating her favorite leaves. You made her sound very majestic, being old, wise, and getting respect from the other creatures of the island.

Once when a visitor came to the island, the turtle made him feel welcome. I liked the ending punch line of the story. The kindness of the turtle made the visitor conclude that animals might even be polite and kinder than humans! Nicely done.

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#4753104

Review of My Trinkets, Special Page 2

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

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HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

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Hi Megan, and Happy WDC Anniversary!

I loved your very impressive trinket page! It's trinkets and more! You also used this to display some of your many awards, plaques, and ribbons. The image is amazing, as most of your images are. You have several of your merit badges there, too.

I can hardly believe you were able to make all of those trinkets! I feel like I need to catch up! LOL

Your trinkets are very pretty, and I thank you for posting a link to this item on the newsfeed. I had a couple of them, but now I collected them all.

I think I liked the Cinderella and Mad Hatter ones the best, though they are all special in their own way. I see you have Bella Trinkets and dragon ones, too.

You and I have been here for a very long time - Only one month apart from each other. It's impressive that you were able to create so many trinkets in that time, although I forget the year that trinkets were introduced. That makes it even more special!

Thanks again and I hope you are having a terrific anniversary day.

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#4751925

Review of Types of Cats

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your word search item.

Hi Elizabeth and a big Happy Anniversary to you.

I completed your word search item, but I'll have to say that, Persian, took me forever! LOL

I liked the way the board turned green after it was completed. It gave me a sense of accomplishment!

The ones that I did first were the easiest, because then the others started using some of the same letters, and it was more challenging.

I didn't realize that some of the cat names read backward. I found that out when I was looking for Bastet. Once I got the hang of that, I started finding the rest more easily. There were forwards, backward, horizontal, vertical, diagonal, and all different directions.

I thought this activity would be quick and easy, but I can appreciate that you took your time with adding so many cat names, which made it challenging. With eighteen names to find throughout and intertwined, it kept my interest for sure.

I also learned more than I knew before about cat names. I guess I can say that I'm more of a dog person. I know so many dog breed names, but when it comes to cats, I don't knew too much. Great Mane wasn't there! I saw the Bangal at a cat show not too long ago. Those are big! Some of those look like wild cats, but they seemed sweet like all the rest.

I'll have to look up some of those names later, now that you had me curious. I don't know what a Sckhmet is, for example, or what the term, tortoiseshell would mean for a cat. Thanks for enlightening me to the world of cats. Have a great WDC Anniversary month!

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Review of My Cat Tigger

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Reviewed by Maryann

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your pet story.

Hi Tigger, and Happy WDC anniversary to you.
I'm here during "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" review raid to review pet items, and I was so happy to come across yours.

Pets do become part of our family. You said that well. Now I understand what the Tigger means in your user name and I can respect that more. My favorite part of your story was when you spoke about the temperamental nature of Tigger. She can be a gabby Tabby or a Crabby Tabby. That was so funny and you put a big smile on my face.

I have three large dogs. But growing up, my family had a cat. That cat was a big part of my family, as you mentioned the cat is with yours. Your hilarious recounting of your husband wanting to put your cat in the car to take to the vet, rather than get a cat carrier reminded me of my childhood with our cat. Only, our cat thought she was a dog and she went everywhere with us, including long car rides. We never had a carrier, so I guess we were extremely lucky. Unfortunately, as an adult, I became asthmatic and allergic to cats. Reading your well-written story brought back fond memories of those days of yesteryear.

Oh my gosh, what you went through!!! You are like a hero, Megan. Your house went on fire, but you stopped to save your cat. My husband is always pouring gas in his tractor. I didn't know that can make a fire! Wow!
You even needed to leave your purse, but the most important thing to grab was your cat. Of course, that is understandable. Tigger is a member of the family!

I'm glad things worked out well for you. You were able to stay with loved ones while your house was being rebuilt and everyone, including Tigger, was alright. Chilling story, though. I'm going to get nightmares thinking about it. It's a good thing you and your husband were quick thinkers in a crisis situation.

I loved your ending paragraph. It brought good closure to your sweet story, and made me imagine a typical day in the life of Megan and Tigger. She greets you when you come home, she watches TV with you. I could picture the content Tabby Cat looking out the patio window in the sun. It seems that one of the best things that happened to your family was when your husband found the kitten in the cornfield one day in the past. You were all meant to be together.

I love the images you included with your story. You do images well.

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#4751556

Review of When David Chose Me

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your story poem.

Hi Iluvhorses, and a big Happy WDC Anniversary to you. I noticed that you write a lot of poems, so I chose this one to visit. I felt that you did a great job with the prompt you had to work with. I really didn't expect how well you could write all that about a pebble, and I was very impressed.

I thought it was creative of you to write the story from the pebble's point of view. The pebble tells the tale with an almost wisdom, as it recounts how the wave set it down on the beach, for David to someday pick up.

I could imagine from you descriptions, the lone little pebble on the sandy beach. The person, David, I'll assume it's a child focused on finding just the right stone, is calm and intent as he carefully examines each potential rock.

Your readers will be able to visualize the child searching for just the right one. Each ancient stone had been tumbled over and over until it was made to be smooth. I thought your poetic words brought beauty to that, by saying it as, 'countless tossings'.

Soon, the little pebble was finally picked up. Fun piece! I hope you have a great Anniversay day!

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#4750947

Review of The Fortune Teller

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your Paranormal poem.

Hi Joto and a very Happy WDC Anniversary to you. Gosh, you’ve been here a long time. I’m surprised that our paths haven’t crossed. I’ve been a member for over 22 years. You must be as mysterious as your great poem.

I didn’t see the ending coming at all, so I thought that was brilliant.

Your poem started well, too. We’ve all seen fortune tellers, and I thought it was interesting to read a poem from their point of view. This one goes from town to town in order to find people to tell fortunes to. Your words had us in this person’s mind, as they recall providing happy information or comfort to those they speak with.

How eerie it must have been to suddenly see nothing but a gray fog. Your creative description made me imagine bleakness to come.
What’s a fortune teller to do? …Make things up, of course! Well done. I enjoyed this one. Have a great Anniversary weekend!

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#4750741

Review of Magic Whiplash

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

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Hi Faith! I hope you're doing great and enjoying your WDC anniversary.

What a great idea for a contest! It's sad that the contest is invalid. Maybe it's time to take the link off of your item and simply talk about the prompt instead.

I tried doing a similar small story at the GoT activity, so I know how difficult it can be - maybe I just talk too much! LOL Seriously, I can appreciate how you were able to write a sensible story with the word limitations. It's not easy, as anyone who tried can tell you.

Your story offers a whimsical adventure! I thought the concept was great, and you executed it well. You named all four of the Elemental Mages and explained their abilities. The story, while tiny, was still able to hint at the excitement which was apparent.
Your readers will see the magic glowing, the heat blazing, the barrier shattering, and then the work of Usha which was brilliantly inspired.

I liked how you showed the mages working together to display a magical whiplash. You even included a happy ending!! He would now enter into a new life. Well done in putting this fun piece together. And happy WDC anniversary.

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#4750308

Review of Limericks

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Reviewed by Maryann

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your limericks.

Hi Pumpkin and Happy WDC Anniversary to you.

Oh, I love limericks! You did a great job with these. I hope you did well in the contest activity.

Limericks are fun and silly. I feel that you succeeded in achieving both of those ideas in your limericks item.

What a great idea to have Hank be a prankster. Prank and Hank go really well together.

The second one was sweet, too. Right away, I thought of active little children, running free on a big farm.

I thought these two lines could have been polished up a bit more:
There once was a farm in Scottsville,
They had a big barn and a cornfield.

Maybe you might change, 'cornfield', to windmill. Or, you could change the whole line to something like, 'They had a large donkey named Phil.

It's otherwise a fun limerick, and very creative. Happy Anniversary Week! I hope you have a good one!

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#4749723

Review of The Flower Seller

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Reviewed by Maryann

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

This review contains some of my brief thoughts about your poem.

Hi Bob and Happy WDC Anniversary!

I was attracted to your poem because you had a really nice title and brief introduction. Although I'm a bit allergic to flowers, I always find them very beautiful.

The presentation of your poem is great. I like that you left room between your stanzas. In my opinion, the larger bold type and spacing make it more enjoyable to read.

What I also found enjoyable is your smooth rhyme. I love poems that rhyme, and you seemed to do that effortlessly. Nicely done.

I could imagine a flower seller. Your words made me think about what such a seller imagines when they put their arrangments together. As you mentioned in your various stanzas, one could beautify their rooms, say, 'I'm sorry', or simply enjoy the beauty and fragrance when they need a lift.

I felt that you covered many ideas about flowers and that you may awaken the senses of your readers. They can certainly 'see' the shades, colors, and shapes. They can also marvel at the fresh, perfumy scents. I know that I do.

May the fourth be with you! You have your anniversary on a good weekend - Star Wars Day and Cinco de Mayo. Have a great weekend!

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#4748095

Review of the Lost Shoe

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hello, Llothy. I came across your cute story, and I’m glad I did. I really enjoyed the light humor and the sweet farm theme.

I wonder how this story did in the competition for which it was entered. I hope well. I thought it read smoothly and had a fun plot.

Suggestion: I would capitalize the word, The, in the title. It should read, ‘The Lost Shoe’.

I believe that you successfully managed to write a great story from the prompt, ‘Write a story using the words, chicken, bottle, and shoe.

I think in such challenges, it’s usually a good idea to put those required words in bold font. Sometimes the challenge asks for it.

You opened the story well. Your readers get the idea that Amber is really tired, but she knows that it’s she who is responsible for taking care of the farm animals. Your readers can understand her frustration in trying to get ready when all she wanted to do was go back to sleep. To make matters worse, she can’t find one of her her shoes, so she gets stressed about it.

I don’t blame her for getting stressed, you wrote that she forgot to feed the animals the day before, so she really needs to feed them today or they will starve. Yikes! It made me wonder if farmers sometimes forget to feed their animals, but maybe not. It’s a story and anything can happen in a story after all.

Your readers can feel her stress build as she starts to get concerned about the sick animal that needs medicine, yet she still can’t find her shoe. I think you built up the suspense well, as we wonder what will happen next.

My favorite part was the humorous punch line at the end. After looking everywhere, she finally found it in the dogs mouth, and the animals didn’t starve! Fun story with a happy ending.

I enjoyed your story. I think if you left a space between the paragraphs it would have a better look. Nice work.

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#4747987

Review of Reviewing Advice Forum

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Lornda! I thought I'd stop by to interrupt your day! Really, you have so many items, and I should actually give more of them some pretty stars, so here I am for this one.

This item is very useful, in that it is there to show new members, or any members for that matter, tips, advice, and useful links about reviewing. "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" is there as a guide to help in this area.

The heading is presented well. It's clean, neat, and easy to follow.
I like that you give the ability for a person to skip to the bottom if all they wish to do is skip to the forum. Many members, after all, have already enjoyed the information here, and simply want to go to the end of the heading. The little details such as this, all add together to make this item so special.

Once a member tries out the tips about reviewing, they are offered the ability to join "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" , if they wish. They simply put, 'Join' in the subject line, and that's it! They will be added in a timely manner.

The heading looks great. I like the drop-down links, for example. One can click on general links, or articles on Writing. The images which you added to separate these drop-down menus are superpowered cute!

The general links menu has the WDC 101 link included in it. That's one of my favorite places to send a newbie for helpful information. I've been there many times myself, and I've been a member for twenty-two years!

Another great section in this heading is the part about review links. This and the above, makes this well put together item a one stop shop for newbies, and anyone who might be searching for information. Nice work in putting this item together.

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#4747911

Review of Gamelandia Letter

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Itchy Barn! I'm back again! I found this story intriguing because I'm a bit embarrassed to say, I had absolutely no idea what a 'diorama' was. I must be getting old

I thought I'd learn something new today, what a diorama is, and have fun reading your story at the same time.

Gosh, is this the same teacher who assigned that last after the summer assignment? What a clever person they are!

So, I had to look it up on the internet. I found that 'a diorama is a replica of a scene, typically a three-dimensional model either full-sized or miniature. Sometimes it is enclosed in a glass showcase for a museum. Dioramas are often built by hobbyists as part of related hobbies such as military vehicle modeling, miniature figure modeling, or aircraft modeling' In the case of your story, it's an internet thing.

I laughed out loud when I started reading your story! You are good at comedy! That's a talent that can't really be taught! The beginning opening paragraph talked about how the village had turned into a pre-war zone because it was in the middle of an update.

How much fun is that! I could imagine from your descriptions Pac-Man and Mrs. Pac-Man destroying houses, and Donkey Kong and others throwing things like barrels around all over the place. I used to play Farmville years ago when it was popular on Facebook. (Ah the memories!) I could picture planting my strawberries, and watching the chaos and havoc of aliens attacking the crops! LOL Such fun ideas!
Maybe that should be a real game! ...Farming through chaos! I downloaded your Happy Travels years ago. Did you ever think of making another game?

I like the bullet notes that Xbox and Nintendo 'wrote'. And, it included bringing a backup card in case the city gets lost and needs to reboot! Thanks for sharing the humorous story.

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#4747887

Review of What I Didn't Do Last Summer

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Itchybarn! I'm participating in the Game of Thrones Competition on our site. One of the tasks includes reviewing red case members. I heard that WDC had some little glitches this morning, so I didn't want to bother the big guy or your mom while they might be busy.
This gave me the opportunity to visit your port again. I think it's been a while since we chatted, so here I am!

Wow, what a fun story this is! I think it was clever of your teacher to give that assignment. Most of the time, we hear about teachers who insist their students write an essay about how they spent their summer.
This one was an assignment about how one didn't spend their summer! I thought that was very unique, indeed. I bet you and your fellow students had a blast writing it!

I'm going to work backward and speak about the ending, which I absolutely loved! You said, "I didn’t even get to say that I still had 900 million dollars left" LOL That was such a fun line! I might tell my husband that when we dream of winning the lottery. I'll mention what I want to do first, and then I will tell him, 'then I'll decide what to do with the rest of it'!

I had to go back and look at which genres you chose to list this in.
I would perhaps take out finance, and add in comedy instead. You wrote this, in my opinion, in a way that gave a bit of light humor, which I enjoyed very much.

I would jump up and down if I won a billion dollars.
That was a good start and set the scene for the fun times to come.

I didn't know what hunter-jumpers were, but I will look that up. Gosh, my daughter took horseback riding lessons for many years. I should know that! LOL

It was so sweet to include that you would also give a million to all of your closest friends. Great sentiments and the thought was there, as it is said. Thanks for sharing this great story.

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#4747851

Review of No Dialogue Contest-CLOSED

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi QP doll. I thought this was a great forum. I bet you think it's weird that people have suddenly been reviewing old forums.
It's part of a quest from the Game of Thrones Challenge in which I'm participating. We need to find inactive forums and review them.

I wondered if your forum had anything to do with the dialogue contest which I entered last week...It was similar (though that one was dialogue instead of no dialogue), but, of course, this forum came first. Either way, it was really fun and it's good that a great thing keeps going.

I must say that this forum of yours had a really pretty presentation.
The image at the beginning of the heading is definitely one of the best that I've ever seen on our site. It shows kittens at a birthday party and says No Dialogue contest and Happy Birthday Writing.com. I hope you'll bring this contest out again for another WDC site anniversary.
Maybe in this September? It would be fun!

I liked that you gave the option to skip to the bottom. This comes in handy for people who have already read it all and just want to get to the bottom. Very convenient.

It seems fair that you had several judges. And a big congratulations for the Quill Awards! You see, as I was getting to about a great thing, people love these quick, fun little dialogue-type contests!

Also, you made it easy to enter in my opinion. You put the rules in the heading cleanly and neatly. Short, fiction stories, using no dialogue or inner dialogue. Word count is listed, along with dates needed, etc. Nice work, and congrats on creating such a successful activity.

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#4747727

Review of SLAM!

Review by Maryann

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Rated: 18+

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Hi Cappucine! As part of the "Game of Thrones" activity, the participants need to read and review closed forums. I was very happy to come across yours because I do remember that at one time these slam poems were so very popular!

I used to participate in Pita's anti-slam activities. Remember her? Fun times for sure. I did more, I think it was for Leger, but I can't recall, where we had to write zombie poems, like this one: "A Good Zombie Fright" . I'm sure I would have participated in this one of yours if I had known about it. Maybe I was too new to the site, as this was created the year that I joined. Gosh, you have been a member since the site was 'born'! Congratulations on your successful years here, by the way.

Your contest forum mentioned that these poems were to be regular poems, and not anti-slam poems. I read the heading thoroughly, and I felt that all of the directions were clear and easy to follow.

I thought it was a great idea to have your participants post their entries as a reply to the prompt for that round. What an easy way to keep track of it all. It was smart to offer a different forum, "The SLAM! Green Room" , where people could talk about the slam contest, or whatever came to their minds. This kept your contest forum clean and neat.

What fun it must have been to have those who placed in the prelim rounds eligible to participate in the final rounds - the best of the best.

Your contest seemed fair because there were three host judges to pick the winners.

The entries also had to be newly created for the contest. This, I believe, encouraged your participants to write new poems. The instructions were clear to say that the entries couldn't be edited after the deadline. That made the judges job a bit easier, that they wouldn't have to keep checking to see if the entry had been modified.
They should never need to do that! Good job with this and thanks for bringing back great memories.

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#4747722

Review of 15 for 15 Contest --- Closed

Review by Maryann

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi Legerdemain! I was tasked with the quest of visiting and reviewing some inactive forums, and right away your 15 for 15 Contest forum came to mind. I'm glad that I stopped here again because it brought back some great memories.

I do remember that I participated in this activity! What fun I had adding things to "Maryann's 15 for 15 Scrapbook " ! I wouldn't have that item if it hadn't been for the prompts and encouragement from you and this activity.

As I see all of the posts, and, of course, the beautiful trophy award at the top near the brief introduction, I can imagine that I was not the only one who loved this item.

The brief introduction, by the way, made your contest very inviting. All a person needed was fifteen minutes a day to write. It sounds like a light commitment that anyone can easily do. I did it, and I found it to be, not only easy to do, but fun to do!

The colors of the font and images in the heading add to the feeling of fun. I think it was all presented well and the rules were simple to understand. I liked that you have a drop note of the easy-to-follow rules. This made the heading less cluttered and therefore, less intimidating. Your visitors could simply click on things as needed for further information.

In a nutshell, we needed to write for fifteen minutes a day, for fifteen days. You listed the exact days so there was no confusion.
We didn't need to be concerned about a word count, and you gave picture prompts. People were free to write poems or stories, but they needed to follow that strict fifteen-minute time limit. That was fun and very unique. I've never seen anything like your contest since.

I clicked on a few of the picture prompts, and it really brought back great memories. Thanks for the fun!

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#4747158

Review of In Her Memory

Review by Maryann

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi Webwitch. I thought this was truly a beautiful tribute to your beloved mom, who passed in July of 2013. ...Or as you were calling it, 'A memorial remembrance'. I also thought it was nice that you had added the memorial tribute to a newspaper in remembrance of her. It was good, I thought, that you added a message about that near the bottom of your sweet poem.

This item has a very pretty ribbon on it. Very thoughtful of the person to have added it. I see that you have review only so I can't give you any stars, but of course, I would give you ten if I could for this item.

The poem in general is delicate and light, just enough to give dynamic meaning.

It was sweet that you began the poem, 'Mom', as though this were a letter directly to her. I'm sure if she could see it, she would be honored and feel loved by her darling daughter.

You wrote in your poem that Mom didn't pass alone because a piece of you went with her. Yes, I can understand those words. You will always be with her, as she will always be with you. And you expressed that sentiment as well when you mentioned that her love remains. You remember her in smiles, in tears, just everywhere, which is true for our loved ones who are no longer here with us. They will never leave our memories. 'Forever in our Hearts' is a touching sentiment, indeed. I recall seeing that sentiment on memorials of beloved deceased ones.

I thought that you ended this touching, heartfelt memorial poem in a great way. It makes the reader able to imagine that there is hope of seeing those beloved ones once again, as you wrote, in eternity. Well done tribute.

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#4747122

Review of Walking Through the Woods on a Misty Day

Review by Maryann

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello again! Oh my gosh, is there nothing in port that doesn't already have an awardicon on it! I would have given this story one, but, of course, it already has one. So, just pretend that I gave it.

I liked the talk about the dragonfly at the beginning and then the narration of seeing it once again. It seemed like the same one. It could have been. And that actually gave me chills.

You wrote this story in a way that will capture the interest of your readers. It certainly captured my interest. In fact, I was very touched by the paragraph where the narrator walked back to the village and pondered the beauty of life, especially nature and that little dragonfly, and all the projects and stress seemed to go away, leaving the narrator with a feeling of peace. I don't talk about my life much, being a more personal person, but I almost died when I was forty-six years old. After two years of much time in the hospital, having all sorts of operations and medicines, nurses coming to the house, etc., I was finally well and able to go out. I was so grateful and stopped to smell the roses so to speak. I remember looking up and seeing birds flying. I was completely in awe and I was able at that time to appreciate and enjoy all the little things. I overheard a young couple bickering about who knows what. It was so trivial, and it made me realize that people overthink and stress the dumbest things, when they should, instead, be appreciating the remarkable beauty around them. Anyway, your story brought back these memories and I wanted to say that, I get it.

So getting back to the rest of your story..I enjoyed reading about how the person telling the story thought of the beautiful dragonfly as a totem, there to give her strength to tackle her projects and what she viewed as problems in life. As I mentioned in your other stories and poems that I've seen, you wrote descriptions that can make your readers feel that they are right there on that walk.

I loved the ending, where she saw the dragonfly again, and this time, she was able to get a picture of it!

The image which you supplied at the end of the story was a perfect complement to it. Nicely done.

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#4747077

Review of One Long Day in Chicago

Review by Maryann

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Rated: 18+

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Hi Webby, I'm back again and I hope you're not tired of hearing from me by now! After I read your last detective story, I remembered that you mentioned this chapter in the series was entered in a contest, and you did it slightly differently. So, I wanted to come by and check it out.

I read it last night from my iPad, but I wanted to review it on my larger computer, or my review would have looked like my seven-year-old granddaughter typed it! LOL

I knew it would be good, and I wasn't at all disappointed. To be honest, I liked the first storyline better, but this one was great! It's like comparing apples to oranges. They are both great but different and it comes down to what a person likes.

I was, indeed, very impressed at the wording in this story. I felt that you used way more 1930s lingo in this one, than the other one. You must have done so much research to learn those words. Really, it's like you wrote it in a different language. That was remarkable and it's no wonder that this story won first place in the site contest. Big congratulations to you.

I was also impressed that you used the pop-up glossary thing in this story. I can't remember what it's called..I wrote an article using that when it was introduced, but I don't normally see people using it. Funny story - Last night when I read this on my iPad, I couldn't get it off the screen each time I clicked on it. It's an iPad thing. But I liked to read where one was Lake Michigan, what copper was, etc.

Your 1930s gangster/slang wording in this story was abundant and very well done. I found that in just about every single sentence.
Your readers will feel like they're right there with Gloria, Lou, and Gary in the Chicago Speakeasy and places. They will read words like gumshoe, heist, and Abyssinia! I knew most of those words in this story, but I did walk away learning more than I knew before I read your story.

You thought up a great plot. Gloria's brother was set up to take the heat for killing a guy, but his alibi was that he had been robbing a jewelry store at that time, so it wasn't him who did the murder. Lots of twists and turns. Of course, Lou so cleverly solved the crime, and helped out people along the way, like saving poor Mona's life!

My favorite line was, "Ah, that Gloria. She’s a swell secretary for an old gumshoe like me. But the doll’s a trouble magnet." You have a way of writing that makes your readers come to adore your characters, Gloria and Lou.

As in your last story, this story had a happy ending, which I liked. Lou, Gloria, and Gary were able to celebrate a job well done. And, I felt that your story was well done!

I felt that it was a good touch to add an author's note at the bottom, explaining about Prohibition and the time period in Chicago.

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