Intruiging concept. Maybe you could do a little more with the scenery, to make it seem more realistic. I like the point you're trying to make. Maybe you could go into the characters a little more, to illustrate the rungsof socity and such. It's a little ambiguous about characters at the moment. This could be fantastic wih a little more character development.
Doing well,
Mel.
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