okay, this was a veryvery scary chapter. at first, i was like 'HENRY IS GOING TO FREAKING DIE.' and next, i was like 'HOLY *toot* THANK GOD FOR HORUS'. and then, finally, i was like, 'DAMMIT. HENRY IS STILL GOING TO FREAKING DIE'. now, my mind is blank. thanks a lot for the cliffhanger -,-" now, i guess i'll have to wait till next year, since you would rather be onlining than doing ur homework. BAD NAZRAN, BAD ! XD
thanks for telling me u updated, i appreciate it :) well, happy new years !
oh my ! that line just got me grinning like a chesire cat XD man, you know how much i like all these romantic and mushy things right ? :D dude, you made your character cry :"( and, i felt it. AMAZING ! you managed to "capture the emotion". **clapclap
okay, maybe the screaming 'LEAVE!' part was a little too much just so Michelle could pack her stuff. maybe it should've been a little more subtle. still, your reason made sense. but, i laughed :D
“I kinda love you too.”, very cliche. i liked it though :S
okay, the sudden change of environment freaked me out. and i thought it was ALL romance and mushy-ness ! XD anyway, very unexpected. my heart is beating fast actually. so, i'd say this is one of your most successful chapters. i suggest you keep it short like this, so that it doesn't hurt anyone's eyes XP
also, one of my longest reviews to date ! i like romance yo. keep it up ! :D
haha, i like the fact that it has a dose of humor in it, despite it being an action kind of story. again, the suspense ! it's killing me, in a good way. i'm glad we finally got to check out michelle's condition. and, you have just succeeded in making my heartbeat double, which is good. i feel like you're slowly evolving into a better writer as the chapters proceed. thumbs up for you ! (again XP)
okay, like i told you just now, you use many complicated words. it's cool :) and yes, the plot is starting to get a move on. that's awesome. oh, and the suspense has really got me wondering what would happen next. maybe next time you could explain a little more, so that it doesn't leave people pondering. btw, i'll be cheering u on as u continue the series.
Pretty awesome :) Loved the fact that you thoroughly explained on the Teh Tarik and stuff like that :D seems like you want to introduce people from other countries to acknowledge the things we have in Malaysia. you're a Promoter ! :D thumbs up to you for your efforts ! :)
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