Good, bad , odd and nonsensical. I'd welcome them all but that's ingenuousness of a newbie I presume.
Unless it isn't completely reserved for the newbies and this was a concealed showcase of the many reviews you so gratefully cherish and adore? Nope? I didn't think so, it couldn't be. I've read your work! ;)
Although several attempts to highlight an amicable relationship between you and your parents, for me the piece read aggressively.
I think largely due to the almost militant directness of the piece I found myself seeking further explanation of why you were detaching yourself from your parents if they were so special to you.
Overall it was concise and explanatory which was great.
I think a congratulations is due, CONGRATUALTIONS TYLER! What a well documented occasion.
Alas I think my own recollections of tooth loss were an altogether more subdued affair having already had the tooth fairy bubble popped for me. Siblings can be cruel lol.
I hope Tyler recieves a different experience and is graced with her presence.
The poem didn't really create a mood for me and read like an excercise in rhyming.
I'm don't have a lot of experience myself so take from this review what ever resonates with you. I think your intension was a simplistic piece but maybe a tad too simplistice for me.
However keep up the work, we are all here to improve. Good luck
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