Writing style - good (not a "blase" way) but it fits to what your character is trying to say. I don't think I could have said / told it better myself.
As far as content - BINGO! Change the gender and I can absolutely relate. Mind process, reasoning (and fear) are dead on. Wish I had the balls to "cut away" from my spouse as easily like your character. Your studies are paying off - if that's part of what you're trying to accomplish with your writing.
I'd like to see this in a longer piece - Where is she when she speaks this? Why did she get fired? What kind of job did she hold? Why does she feel "fucked-up"? Maybe a deeper glimpse of her husband.
It is good as it is, but it could be very good if "we" could see deeper into the character and her surroundings.
Thanks for then read. Hope to see more from you! : )
Mark
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