Short but sweet, gets a point across... I'm just curious of the story behind this little ditty. I'm sure that the story behind it is probably as interesting as, if not more than, this little thought itself.
As always, I love your poetry, however, due to the years, the rhyme scheme in the first stanza is a bit off, (since two and three don't rhyme) and as a result, this poem starts off a bit shaky. However, you quickly recover. The shakiness in the beginning of the poem, however, can be seen as an allegory to how shaky relationships can be when first starting out. Thank you for sharing this poem, and WRITE ON!!
I think that it's really important to understand who the writer is in order to better understand their work. Through this piece, you've allowed us a brief glimpse into your life, and therefore, we know where you're coming from. This piece is really well written, and I appreciate you taking the effort to share your life with the writing.com community.
Yet again, another gem from you Ann Ticipation! Mazel tov on making it 39 years with your husband! So few marriages last nowadays, and it is refreshing to see one that does... especially one where two people obviously cherish each other as much as you and Rod.
Congratulations again, and this is a wonderful poetic gift. I hope he appreciated it!
This is such a great idea, a great way to spice up someone's port for the week, and I'm just curious if you'll keep these images up in your port? I run a group, called The Happy Birthday Group, and these graphics would really spice up our forum. Would it be okay if I used some of them there?
LOL... with the way I put in the words, Dumbledore ends up being reincarnated as Tom Cruise, and Malfoy marries himself. Also, Hermione ends up being the 101- year old half Aunt of Harry, half Mermaid, and the daughter of dumbledore and ron weasley. I was rolling on the floor laughing hysterical and just giggling when I read this. Write on!
beautiful poem, however in the first stanza, I would change it to "never let go of the dreams..."
I see you are a newbie... or at the very least unupgraded, and you deserve a bit of exposure, so my group, "Invalid Item" is going to sponsor this piece because this poem raises us up!!
Suggestions: You might want to add a bit of writingML.
Overall Impression: It's wonderful that you want to share the truth about your religion with the rest of writing.com. Nowadays there are too many misinformed people, who think that Islam is all about terrorism and jihad. Thank you for enlightening those of us who are not of your faith.
Review: This is such a funny concept. I was watching the Olympics last week and hating Emily Hughes and Sasha Cohen... I wish I could be that thin!! To imagine them big and fat puts a smile on my face.
I would like to note, however, that you need to better define what you consider disgusting, because everyone has a different view point on what is and is not gross.
Isn't Cinderella traditionally spelt "Cinderella" with two Ls? At least you are consistent in the misspelling in all of the titles, but it seems to me that if you are going to go as far as to use such a similar title as the original fairy tale, I think that you should spell the name the same.
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Instead of saying "things" when referring to words used from the books, in this item's description, why don't you replace that word with "vocabulary"?
This poem brought tears to my eyes, it is so beautiful. Please keep writing your amazing poetry. It is truly from the heart . I love your poetry! You and your husband are truly lucky to have each other.
This piece reminds me of the Harry Potter novels, where the love of his mother protects him. The fact that the mother in this poem risks her life for her sons shows an amazing maternal bond. You seem to be able to catch a brief moment or glimpse in a poem, with a magic and rhyming ability that is unmatched by any here on this site.
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In the second stanza, it is not apparent, whether the 'you' that you are referring to in the poem is "God" or the audience of the poem. I'm assuming audience, since you did not capitalize "you", but on the first read through, I was going to correct you and tell you that you needed to capitalize "You" if you meant it as a reference to The Almighty.
I think that this is a really great concept, but I would like to suggest that you use writingML to add a bit of color. Perhaps you could assign each character a different color font, or you could have the truths and dares appear in color?
This is a few days late, but {iHAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY! You are such a very talented poet, and this is an awesome poem. Love always seems to make everything bad in life appear to disappear.
A strong folder introduction makes us want to read the materials contained therein. This folder's intro is a bit weak, and redundant. You may wish to elaborate as to which branch of Christianity you follow most closely, or add some writingML to draw people in. Also, to have a folder within a folder as the only item is just a waste of port space in my opinion.
This is certainly an excellent holiday toast, however, you never speak of what we should share... be it material gifts, or just love and kindness?
I don't really understand why you call love an "invention" though, because we would not be here if not for love, and so love seems a universal constant that has been and always will be.
This poem was written very well, and obviously references the tsunami which occurred last year. However, I am curious if this story was based on truth... if it was based on a real fisherman, or if it was just a hypothetical.
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Overall Impression: Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem, and HAPPY SAINT PATRICK'S DAY!!
Review: This is such a funny concept. I was watching the Olympics last week and hating Emily Hughes and Sasha Cohen... I wish I could be that thin!! To imagine them big and fat puts a smile on my face.
Isn't Cinderella traditionally spelt "Cinderella" with two Ls? At least you are consistent in the misspelling in all of the titles, but it seems to me that if you are going to go as far as to use such a similar title as the original fairy tale, I think that you should spell the name the same.
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. I love your poetry! You and your husband are truly lucky to have each other.
"Almighty" and "Hand" should both be capitalized, because they are part of Gd.