Wow this is the best sensous poem to date on this site. It is hard to write something so intimate, without being cliche, but you were very successful. It was the title that brought me in, but the poem caught my mind and heart. I have put you on my favorite section, so I can come back and read again and again. I can wait to read what else you have.
Keep on writing
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Great job I still can't figure how to change color of my typing, and YOU made a shape. I know that is hard and on top of that, you made a very beautful poem. A tribute to someone you love. My favorite part is "...and as long as I have breath until the chill of death...". Not to compare you to Browning, but it is Brown-ish. I like very much.
Very good you had me drawn into the world of remembering, I wanted to know more of what else the woman did to make the man smile. did they stay together? What I am trying to say feeblely is this very well written. I like the flow and meter, the subject matter can be related to other people not just yourself, it leaves you wanting more, so I am going to your portfolio and see what else I can read.
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