Great concept, paring a series with an incredibly hot female cast with my absolute favorite fetish. Unfortunately There's no real content yet to comment on and the character who many would argue the least deserving of and least likely to use mind control, is the one who gets the hat. In general I feel stories where the heroes receive mind controlling gifts lend themselves poorly to erotic fiction since the very traits that make the main character admirable to a viewing audience are the same ones that make them unwilling to press their advantage. Personally I feel the story would be better served if a slightly less straightforward and honest character had the hat but I am still eagerly awaiting additional content in this story nonetheless.
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