Great! I felt like I was in the diner with you, watching those people. I could imagine them clearly. Though I haven't been in the same situation as most, I still see these same groups everyday. The feelings portrayed in this story were amazing. Keep writing!! :)
Wow. I really loved the way you surprised us with revealing that you're a woman. The way you set the whole thing up was very vivid and real. I felt like I was hearing it first hand or watching it happen, you are amazing at describing things. In short, I loved it!
i thought it was great, but think it may have too much detail. the detail is great but limit yourself a little and this work will be five stars definitely!
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