Nice piece if a little jumbled in places. Although it doesn't really ahve an structure to it that doesn't make it bad. It makes it very thoughtful and free flowing.
Okay have to say its a really good read and very gripping.
I can even imagine the amount of work and time that you must have spent researching some of the elements for this story. But i have to say it was certainly well spent. It brings a clean edge to the whole thing and the character's slide in and out of there elements with graced and ease.
Only thing to watch is a few spelling mistakes where the wrong word has slipped in.
Nice free form style poem. Some real good diction that really conveyed the joy and wonder of finding out you can fly without the need of assistance.
Flying has to be one of those things that as children we wish for and hope one day too convey, we can only imagine what primitive man thought when he saw birds in flight. At least with a simple aid we can too some degree experience the joy. But it doesn't come as close as being able to do it under your own steam.
Great idea i plan on adding a link to my profile on a few sites i'm on.
As this is very much a digital age and people put all manner of things in there forum profiles has anyone considered doing banner icon's for people to use on forum's. They can bring in extra searches and be seen by guest and member's alike.
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