You did a good job describing a lonely existence. Once I wrote a poem about loneliness, and I used the lady bug as my only companion when I am alone in my room. But I like your descriptions. You depicted nature as solitary and that is superior to my mere lady bug.
"Finding peace in the music
Finding peace in the art"
Funny, the way I see it, you are trapped in the music and trapped in the art because that prevents you from getting out of your shell.
If this is your first poem then you have talent. Next time instead of being so direct with your words, use indirect expressions.
ex) "I feel alone" can be said as
"I listen to my silent whispers
The only voice I will ever hear"
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