Wow, what an introduction for Lafayette! Your writing, again, weaves the plot and characters with ease. I could visualise all this clearly and crisply in my mind from your descriptions. Very well done. I look forward to reading further continuations of this story. All best wishes, Musings
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Beginning with the scene setting related to the character, Mr Moonlight is shrouded in mystery, but we do learn something about him. I followed your writing with ease, and it's amazing how much is revealed to Maria in the space of this first section, but it doesn't feel rushed at all. I look forward to reading more! All best wishes, Musings
This simple poem has a clear message and flows nicely. I found it relatable, I have had the displeasure of a broken bed and this poem reflects that well. The only thing I would perhaps alter is the penultimate verse, where both lines use the word out. Perhaps "up and about" would be another option. Nevertheless an enjoyable read!
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