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Review of Point Blank  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
you have a way of using your words to flow really smothly but at the same time make the reader really think about what you are saying with your witing.. i think this is an excilent peice but it could do with a little bit of editing.

Fav part: The helping hand you felt on the shoulder,
The crushing blow, rolls down like a boulder.
The looks that you throw and the faces you catch,
Your head and your heart find that they seldom match.


GReat job!! and keep writing!
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Review of Sink.  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
I simply love this poem!!

Fav part: I fight through the tide, but it's started turning,
My heart in my throat and my chest is now burning,
I scan the horizon and finally see,
My future descended, reclaimed by the sea

It flows freely and has a great story line!

Least fav: I immersed myself in in a hope and a prayer,
Waiting for something, I thought I saw there.
I stood on the soapbox, called out to the sky,
A response late in coming, with no reason why.


It seems a little more foced like it could use some sanding on the rough eges.


Great job! and keep writing!!

Lincoln girl
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