Wow this is a deep piece of writing! REally good use of words to describe emotions and feelings. it is easy for the reader to pick up on the romance, emotions and relationship. I really like this piece, you hae spent a lot of time on this and it shows as well.
I liked this and I was glad to see the bad man get his comeuppance at the end. HE deserved it. So, you have written a very good piece here and I had to read it to see if he got what was coming to him. That is really great as a writer if you can do that and you have. Good job :)
Very very good. Your words capture the imaginary of your poem extremely well and it is easy to see in the readers mind. It is a great piece of constructing poetry and you have obviously worked hard on it too. I like the detail and descriptiveness of your words.
I really liked this piece. You capture the first flush of new love extremely well. I had to read it again I liked it that much. I don't really think that you can improve on this piece as its really good. IT is also very descriptive and well written and shows the imaginary well and enables the reader to think back on past loves at the start
wow this is a great piece of writing. I went back and read it again, Your writing is very descriptive and captures the story well. IT flows very well and you show the story brilliantly. You also capture what it is like for so many in today's world with ease and grace. I am looking forward to reading more of this.
what an interesting fun piece of writing. i especially liked the last add on piece. The whole piece is very well written and was enjoyable to read. Very descriptive and had a good back story as a whole. I want to read what comes next lol. Keep it up.
Oh wow you have packed in soooooo much emotion into these few short words. Extremely well written and very poignant. i really like it. The emotions overflow with darkness, hurt and sadness. YOu do a good job of gathering all the emotions one feels with a passing.
i really liked the imagery in this short wee poem. You packed a lot in with descriptive wording, darkness, sorrow and eother motions along with telling your story. i think you could possibly expand on this poem into a short story as the elements are all there.
What an interesting piece of self discovery, psychosocial discovery and instant karma biting the character in the arse straight away.
i found this piece very interesting as it is very well written and flowed well through the fight scenes. I like the use of the descriptive wording.
What an interesting piece of your childhood. I think you have a well written piece here and its cool that you are sharing a childhood experience; especially more so that you can remember. lol. The piece is descriptive and flows very well. It is e3asy to relate to.
I really like your short and to the point piece. It is extremely well written. The piece is very descriptive use of wording. I think that you have nailed the Grossblank form as well as encompassing family, experience and death that you classify the piece under. Your piece is very easy to relate to in today's world.
Wow this is a very powerful emotional piece of heartfelt romance, love and betrayal. It is a really good piece and very easy to relate for the reader and myself personally. i really like the use of descriptive wording here. The words have great emotional and powerful drawing in for the reader.
I really liked this so much that i read it out to my godchildren as a story. I think that it is a great piece of inspirational writing. The piece also describes friendships and relationships well. I think this piece is well written and it is clear you have spent some time on this piece.
What an interesting piece. You kept me intrigued and i just had to keep reading through to the end and then read the piece again. I think you have really captured action and adventure genres very well. I also like how you twist in the fantasy side of things.
What a nice piece of writing. I really like your piece that you have shared with all readers. I like how you have set your story out telling us about the dogs that you enjoy walking and their antics. You have great use of descriptive wording as well.
I really enjoyed reading this piece of family history of your 2 4 weekend. I liked the comedic twists of accidents that you share with the reader. Your piece is well set out, descriptive and flows through your story easily which is helpful for the reader.
Your title caught my eye and i had to read your piece to find out what it meant. I really enjoyed reading your piece as i could relate to playing with barbie dolls growing up. I like the twist of how you cant always judge a book by its cover which you showed with you grandma who drove a taxi.
i like you have hit the nail on the head here about taking pleasure from the small things in life. You capture the many meanings of the word comfort very well and it is easy to relate as a reader to what you have written. Work is set out well, great use of descriptive wording.
Interesting piece. i take it it was set out this way for the competition? I wondered because each character is named before speaking instead of using "..." The piece is informative, clear and easy to follow. a very quirky character sketch of writing.
Great piece. very helpful and i ended up reading through a couple of times to try and pick up everything you were saying so i can relate it back to my writing and make improvements. Really well set out and easy to follow. Thank you for writing this informative piece for all.
what a great little piece. You have captured your wife's change in behaviour very very well. I like how you use your dialogue between the characters to move the story along and you have great use of descriptive wording to get your point across. Those 4 words are the hardest thing to keep a secret quiet :)
What a great piece of confronting peoples fears in whatever context they may have them. Reality is that we all do and some of us will act and others will choose not too. You have captured this subject matter very well. Your piece is well written and detailed, clearly getting the point across.
This little piece captures adult love and relationships very well. It The piece touches on erotica elements and could be developed further. Overall a very good short piece of descriptive writing. I would like to have read more. Its pretty cool overall.
This is an Interesting piece and has enough fish hooks to make me interested to read more than what is here. I like the descriptive writing and the piece is well written. The first two paragraphs are great as a mini synopsis and you cover sci fi and fantasy very well.
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