Interesting piece. It kind of draws you in, and holds your thoughts. It spoke to me in a way that I've not thought about in a long time, been in that moment where despair seems more prevalent than hope. You've managed to write it down in such a vivid way.
One comment I do have - it seems a little stilted at times - some lines halt the flow slightly. Unfortunately, I can't think of how to change that though!
Good opening - draws the reader in to find out why the plate was thrown, and why it would be over. You have a way with words, you can feel the attitude from Vicki in her few words - she's not going to fall for his lies again this time!.
I like the way you linked it to the song also. Thanks for sharing.
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