I really like it. It makes me very interested to see what happens next which is good for a preface. One little thing though: aren't tears usually cold, not hot? I liked everything else, especially your description of the sky. I'm a little confused as to what color the sky is because you describe it with warm colors, but then you mention the sky being dark blue. You might want to add a little transition sentance to get across your point that you are talking about the night sky now. This is all my opinion so don't take it to heart if you don't agree with me. It was a good read.
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