I found the poem interesting, however, the line spacing got warped somehow, I would suggest that you find out what made the lines move like that and fix it. The presentation is quite important.
This is not a critique on the work, your thoughts on the cover were amazing. But, I have 1 issue "The Evil Cane, has very basic use." I'm just spit balling here, but the amount of features you could put on it, are numerous, Scythe, Sniper Rifle, Ax, Spear it could be able to transform into so many different things, you don't have to change it, you already have done a lot of work, I just think it could be a more interesting, weapon of mass Evil.
Look the story seems rather interesting, bu I can't get over how annoying it is that I constantly see no Gay, in the rules it's rather limiting for people like me to enjoy something. So I would hope for you to reconsider your stance on this.
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