This is a story with teeth. I really like how you set up the alternating memories with the present. It is a very powerful technique. your descriptive technique is quite strong, the best example being Timmy's catch. We can get right in to Timmy's character. You also have done a nice job with dialogue here. Another impression I have is that there is a lot going on in such a short story, yet you have presented it with mastery; it is not scattered and it hangs together quite well. I had to sit with the ending for some time. I felt at first a bit manipulated, in rereading the end, I think you are successful in bringing this ending off. Really nice work.
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